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Describe one of your favourite photographs. v.1

Describe one of your favourite photographs. v. 1
Describe one of your favourite photographs. You should say: when the photograph was taken what it depicts what significant memory this photograph bears and explain why it is one of your favourite photographs. Follow-up Questions: What do you think about 'Photography' as a career? What makes a good photograph? What are the improvements the latest technologies has brought in photography? How often do you take photographs?   Model Answer 1: Some people have “photographic” faces – faces that attract everybody’s attention – but I don’t.   So, choosing a favourite photograph of mine, with me in it, is indeed a challenge for me. But, I will still go ahead and talk about a picture which, I think, is one of my favourites for some reasons. I will explain in a minute why. The photograph was taken about 4/5 years ago at a formal dinner party after my university graduation ceremony. On that night, all of my university friends were busy taking one picture after another and enjoying the night, so I also decided to do the same and started to take my pictures by forgetting about my “not-so” photographic face for a while. I am not sure exactly how many pictures of mine were taken on that night, but I would assume, it must have been quite a few, as our graduation party had continued for a while, keeping ourselves busy with singing, playing music and enjoying different snacks, one after another. Anyway, once we were done with the party, our picture films were taken to a local photo studio the next day to process them and get their final version. Anyway, when I finally got to see my own pictures, most of them were looking “less than average” except just one. The picture indeed reflected my celebratory mood of that night, with a very happy and glowing face of me. Standing next to me in that picture were a few friends of mine who were splattering water. The picture was taken in front of a very nice background that had some nicely trimmed trees and perfect lighting. Anyway, this is one of my favourite pictures because it brings back some of the most special and beautiful memories – memories like spending my last night as a student with the rest of my friends and recording my first song ever – which I will cherish for the rest of my life. This is one of my most favourite pictures also because, in this very picture, I look to be in my “natural” self.
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Describe
one of your
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favourite
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photographs
. You should say: when the
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photograph
was taken
what it depicts what significant memory this
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photograph
bears and
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explain
why it is one of your
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favourite
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photographs
. Follow-up Questions: What do you
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think
about 'Photography' as a career? What
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makes
a
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good
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photograph
? What are the improvements the latest technologies has brought in photography? How
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often
do you take
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photographs
?
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Model Answer 1:

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Some
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people
have “photographic”
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faces
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–
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faces
that attract everybody’s attention
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–
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but
I don’t.
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So
, choosing a
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favourite
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photograph
of mine, with me in it, is
indeed
a challenge for me.
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But
, I will
still
go ahead and talk about a
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picture
which, I
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think
, is one of my
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favourites
for
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some
reasons. I will
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explain
in a minute why.

The
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photograph
was taken
about 4/5 years ago at a formal dinner party after my university graduation ceremony. On that
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night
, all of my university friends were busy taking one
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picture
after another and enjoying the
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night
,
so
I
also
decided to do the same and
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started
to take my
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pictures
by forgetting about my “not-
so
” photographic
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face
for a while.

I am not sure exactly how
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many
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pictures
of mine
were taken
on that
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night
,
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but
I would assume, it
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must
have been quite a few, as our graduation party had continued for a while, keeping ourselves busy with singing, playing music and enjoying
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different
snacks, one after another.
Anyway
, once we
were done
with the party, our
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picture
films
were taken
to a local photo studio the
next
day to process them and
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get
their final version.
Anyway
, when I
finally
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got
to
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see
my
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own
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pictures
, most of them were looking “less than average” except
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just
one. The
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picture
indeed
reflected my celebratory mood of that
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night
, with a
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very
happy and glowing
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face
of me.

Standing
next
to me in that
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picture
were a few friends of mine who were splattering water. The
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picture
was taken
in front of a
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very
nice background that had
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some
nicely
trimmed trees and perfect lighting.

Anyway
, this is one of my
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favourite
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pictures
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because
it brings back
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some
of the most special and
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beautiful
memories
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–
memories like spending my last
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night
as a student with the rest of my friends and recording my
first
song ever
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–
which I will cherish for the rest of my life. This is one of my most
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favourite
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pictures
also
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because
, in this
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very
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picture
, I look to be in my “natural” self.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS speaking Describe one of your favourite photographs. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
423 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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