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Describe a happy event of your life. v.1

Describe a happy event of your life. v. 1
Describe a happy event of your life. You should talk about: what  the event was when it was why it was a memorable and happy event for you and give some details of the event. Follow-up Questions: What makes people happy? Do you believe money can bring happiness in life? Why childhood is the best time for so many people?   Model Answer 1: Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to talk about such an interesting topic. In fact, I have had several happy events in my life which I remember today.   But, I would like to talk about just one of those happy events which I consider to be very special also. It happened about 8/9 years ago or so, when I just had graduated from my university, and I was very much eager to get a full-time job or some kind of internship. But, the problem was, it was not easy for me to get any job or internship because I didn’t have any kind of formal experience. On top of that, I also didn’t have any access to a computer or the internet at my residence. In other words, applying to jobs wasn’t exactly as easy in those days as it is today. So, I was basically relying on checking for job postings on different local and national daily newspapers and then applying for them by using either postal mail or fax. Needless to say, applying to jobs, one after another, in such old and traditional methods required a substantial amount of money which was not exactly easy for a student like me with no particular source of income. So, at one point, I even decided to do some private tutoring in order to pay for the cost of my job application. In this way, my job applying mission had continued for about 5/6 months before I started to get an invitation for job interviews. I even needed to travel a few cities outside of my hometown to attend the interviews. But, I was getting a bit frustrated as I was not receiving any positive news from any end, even after trying for long 6/7 months. But, finally, on a fine Thursday morning, I received the good news in an official letter. In fact, I would consider that day to be one of the most memorable and happy days of my life as that’s the day when I received the news of my first job offer.
Describe
a
happy
event
of your
life
. You should talk about: what
 
the
event
was when it was why it was a memorable and
happy
event
for you and give
some
details
of the
event
. Follow-up Questions: What
makes
people
happy
? Do you believe money can bring happiness in
life
? Why childhood is the best time for
so
many
people
?
 
Model Answer 1:

Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to talk about such an interesting topic. In fact, I have had several
happy
events
in my
life
which I remember
today
.
 
But
, I would like to talk about
just
one of those
happy
events
which I consider to be
very
special
also
.

It happened about 8/9 years ago or
so
, when I
just
had graduated from my university, and I was
very
much eager to
get
a full-time
job
or
some
kind of internship.
But
, the problem was, it was not easy for me to
get
any
job
or internship
because
I didn’t have any kind of formal experience.
On top of that
, I
also
didn’t have any access to a computer or the internet at my residence.
In other words
,
applying
to
jobs
wasn’t exactly as easy in those days as it is
today
.

So
, I was
basically
relying on checking for
job
postings on
different
local and national daily newspapers and then
applying
for them by using either postal mail or fax.
Needless to say
,
applying
to
jobs
, one after another, in such
old
and traditional methods required a substantial amount of money which was not exactly easy for a student like me with no particular source of income.
So
, at one point, I even decided to do
some
private tutoring in order to pay for the cost of my
job
application. In this way, my
job
applying
mission had continued for about 5/6 months
before
I
started
to
get
an invitation for
job
interviews. I even needed to travel a few cities
outside of
my hometown to attend the interviews.

But
, I was getting a bit frustrated as I was not receiving any
positive
news from any
end
, even after trying for long 6/7 months.
But
,
finally
, on a fine Thursday morning, I received the
good
news in an official letter. In fact, I would consider that day to be one of the most memorable and
happy
days of my
life
as that’s the day when I received the news of my
first
job
offer.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a happy event of your life. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
411 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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