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Describe a famous person you know who is from your country. v.1

Describe a famous person you know who is from your country. v. 1
Describe a famous person you know who is from your country. You should say: who the person is why he/she is famous what makes you mention specifically him/her and describe what positive changes this person has brought to your country. Follow-up Questions: What makes people famous? What are the differences between a famous person and an ordinary person? Tell about one internationally famous person in your country.   Model Answer 1: My country, India, has been lucky to have become the home to many renowned personalities, from word-class sportsmen to world-famous scientists, who have made “India” great. Today, I would like to talk about one such famous person who is also known as the “missile man” of India. Yes, he is none other than Mr A. P. J. Abdul Kalam. Being born in a Muslim family in Tamil Nadu, India, in 1931, the great man studied physics and aerospace engineering in order to become arguably the most prominent Indian nuclear scientist ever. Holding many important roles and positions in the Indian government, this eminent scientist, and also a politician at the same time, gave India one of its most major and important breakthroughs in its "defense technology" by developing the ballistic missile and nuclear weapons programmes.   Later on, this world-renowned scientist also became a president of India. I want to mention this famous person specifically, primarily because he was a very simple and easy-going person, even though he had such extraordinary achievements on his name. Mr Kalam has been an inspiration to millions in the world, who had a great many virtues, dedication, self-mastery, and exceptional scientific aptitude. Born in a rather humble family, this gem of a great leader worked his way to great success. In fact, he was an “epitome” of hard works and success. And as for the positive changes, he dedicated his whole life to his motherland.   Mr Kalam didn’t only pioneer the Indian nuclear and missile defense programmes but also encouraged Indian automobile makers to enhance vehicle technologies in order to “triple” their productivity and efficiency. This great guy also was concerned for young people of his country as he encouraged them to learn in a good way. His message for the youth of India filled them with new confidence. In fact, many of his inspirational books and speeches reverberate through Indian cities and villages, which constantly motivate both the youth and adults, by saying “I can do it. We can do it. India can do it”. This great person, who is still an inspiration for millions, died in 2015.
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famous
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person
you know
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who
is from your
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country
. You should say:
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who
the
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person
is why he/she is
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famous
what
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makes
you mention
specifically
him/her and
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describe
what
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positive
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changes
this
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person
has brought to your
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country
. Follow-up Questions: What
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people
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? What are the differences between a
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person
and an ordinary
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person
?
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about one
internationally
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person
in your
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.
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Model Answer 1:

My
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country
, India, has been lucky to have become the home to
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many
renowned personalities, from word-
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class
sportsmen to world-
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famous
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scientists
,
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who
have made “India”
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great
.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one such
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famous
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person
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who
is
also
known as the “missile
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man
” of India.

Yes, he is none other than Mr A. P. J. Abdul
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Kalam
.
Being born
in a Muslim family in Tamil Nadu, India, in 1931, the
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great
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man
studied physics and aerospace engineering in order to become
arguably
the most prominent Indian nuclear
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scientist
ever.

Holding
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many
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roles and positions in the Indian
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government
, this eminent
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scientist
, and
also
a politician at the same time, gave India one of its most major and
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important
breakthroughs in its
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defense technology
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"
by developing the ballistic missile and nuclear weapons
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programmes
.
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Later on, this world-renowned
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scientist
also
became a president of India.

I want to mention this
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person
specifically
,
primarily
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because
he was a
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very
simple and easy-going
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person
,
even though
he had such extraordinary achievements on his name. Mr
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Kalam
has been an inspiration to millions in the world,
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who
had a
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great
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many
virtues, dedication, self-mastery, and exceptional scientific aptitude. Born in a
rather
humble family, this gem of a
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great
leader worked his way to
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great
success. In fact, he was an “epitome” of
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hard
works and success.

And as for the
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positive
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changes
, he dedicated his whole life to his motherland.
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Mr
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Kalam
didn’t
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pioneer the Indian nuclear and missile defense
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programmes
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also
encouraged Indian automobile makers to enhance vehicle technologies in order to “triple” their productivity and efficiency. This
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great
guy
also
was concerned
for young
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people
of his
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country
as he encouraged them to learn in a
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good
way. His message for the youth of India filled them with new confidence. In fact,
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many
of his inspirational books and speeches reverberate through Indian cities and villages, which
constantly
motivate both the youth and adults, by saying “I can do it. We can do it. India can do it”. This
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great
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person
,
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who
is
still
an inspiration for millions,
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died
in 2015.
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IELTS speaking Describe a famous person you know who is from your country. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
427 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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