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Describe a game you used to play in your childhood. v.1

Describe a game you used to play in your childhood. v. 1
Describe a game you used to play in your childhood. You should say: What type of game it was How you played it Who you played it with And explain why you don't play it anymore. Model Answer 1: I spent my childhood in an urban area that was full of natural graces and wonders. The vast green fields, rivers, hill, the blue sky and the playmates of my childhoods were my best part of my lively and magical childhood. I used to play lots of games in my childhood and among them blind-man's-buff was one of my most favourite. This game required minimum 4-5 kids to play. Initially, one kid would be selected to be blindfolded and his/her eyes would be tied up so that s/he can't see anything. A big circle would be drawn and no one is allowed to go out of this circle. The blind folded kid would try to catch someone while others would try to protect themselves but would not be able to go outside the circle. If the blindfolded kid can touch someone and can say his/her name, the blindfolded kid would get free and the other one who was touched would be blindfolded this time. This was the basic rules of the game and we used to play this game according to this rule. I mostly played this game with my cousins, neighbouring kids and classmates. I was then around 4-5 years old and the other kids whom I used to play with were around the same age. As I recall, I played this game when I was a kid if 4-5 years old. Probably I have not played this game after I was promoted to grade three. This was a game played by kids and in our country this is played by the kids only. It is not at all a game for the grown-ups and I have never seen any adult person playing this game. So, I do not play this game anymore. Among the games I play still now includes cricket, football, badminton, table tennis but not the blind-man's-buff at all. This was a game for kid and I enjoyed this game as a kid.
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a game you
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used
to
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play
in your childhood. You should say: What type of game it was How you
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played
it Who you
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played
it with And
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explain
why you don't
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play
it anymore. Model Answer 1:

I spent my childhood in an urban area that was full of natural graces and wonders. The vast green fields, rivers, hill, the blue sky and the playmates of my childhoods were my best part of my lively and magical childhood. I
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used
to
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play
lots of
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games
in my childhood and among them blind-
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man
's-buff was one of my most
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favourite
. This game required minimum 4-5
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kids
to
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play
.
Initially
, one
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kid
would
be selected
to
be blindfolded
and his/her eyes would
be tied
up
so
that s/he can't
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see
anything. A
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big
circle would
be drawn
and no one is
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allowed
to go out of this circle. The blind folded
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kid
would try to catch someone while others would try to protect themselves
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but
would not be able to go outside the circle. If the blindfolded
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kid
can touch someone and can say his/her name, the blindfolded
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kid
would
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get
free and the other one who
was touched
would
be blindfolded
this time. This was the basic
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rules
of the
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game and
we
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used
to
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play
this game according to this
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rule
. I
mostly
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played
this game with my cousins,
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neighbouring
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kids
and classmates. I was then around 4-5 years
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old
and the other
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kids
whom I
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used
to
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play
with were around the same age. As I recall, I
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played
this game when I was a
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kid
if 4-5 years
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old
.
Probably
I have not
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played
this game after I
was promoted
to grade three. This was a game
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played
by
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kids
and in our country this is
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played
by the
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kids
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only
. It is not at all a game for the grown-ups and I have never
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seen
any adult person playing this game.
So
, I do not
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play
this game anymore. Among the
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games
I
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play
still
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now
includes cricket, football, badminton, table tennis
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but
not the blind-
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man
's-buff at all. This was a game for
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kid
and I enjoyed this game as a
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kid
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a game you used to play in your childhood. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
366 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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