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Describe a foreign musical festival that you enjoyed. v.1

Describe a foreign musical festival that you enjoyed. v. 1
Describe a foreign musical festival that you enjoyed. You should say: When you enjoyed it Where you enjoyed it Who was there with you And explain why you enjoyed it. Model Answer: During my visit the United Kingdom (. . . or say a country name you prefer…) I attended a musical festival there that I enjoyed thoroughly. I went there all of a sudden when I was roaming the London city with one of my friends. I did not even know about the musical program and when I noticed that few famous singers would be joining the festival, I decided to attend there. It was probably 2008 when I was in London to visit my sister’s house and at that time I attended the festival. I am a great enthusiast of music and I usually enjoy music festivals. So I did not miss my chance to attend this festival. The location was second Hampton Street and the festival was in a wide area. As I recall, a small fair and gathering were outside the auditorium and I had to spend a small amount of money to enter the festival. There were some solo performances by young and rising singers and they performed really well. People applauded their performance very much. The presenter told a great lot about the music and since there were many foreigners, she also introduced the songs and singers in great details. Finally, she told about the music history and the history of England’s music and musical instruments. The cool breeze, the people with gaudy dresses, the music and singers took my heart away. I was greatly touched with the local songs and when I saw one of my very favourite singers on the stage, I got very much excited. The festival was a different experience for me especially when it was in a different city.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: 1.     Describe a festival or fair you have attended. 2.     Describe a foreign festival you have enjoyed. 3.     Describe a musical festival you went to.
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Describe
a foreign
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musical
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festival
that you
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enjoyed
. You should say: When you
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enjoyed
it Where you
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enjoyed
it Who was there with you And
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explain
why you
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enjoyed
it. Model Answer:

During my visit the United Kingdom (.
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.
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.
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or
say a country name you prefer…) I attended a
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musical
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festival
there that I
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enjoyed
thoroughly
. I went there all of a sudden when I was roaming the London city with one of my friends.
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I
did not even know about the
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musical
program and when I noticed that few
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famous
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singers
would be joining the
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festival
, I decided to attend there. It was
probably
2008 when I was in London to visit my sister’s
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house
and at that time I attended the
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festival
. I am a great enthusiast of
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music
and I
usually
enjoy
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music
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festivals
.
So
I did not miss my chance to attend this
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festival
. The location was second Hampton Street and the
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festival
was in a wide area. As I recall, a
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small
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fair
and gathering were outside the auditorium and I had to spend a
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small
amount of money to enter the
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festival
. There were
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some
solo performances by young and rising
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singers and
they performed
really
well
.
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People
applauded their performance
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very
much. The presenter
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told
a great lot about the
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music
and since there were
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many
foreigners, she
also
introduced the songs and
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singers
in great
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details
.
Finally
, she
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told
about the
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music
history and the history of England’s
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music
and
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musical
instruments. The cool breeze, the
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people
with gaudy dresses, the
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music
and
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singers
took my heart away. I was
greatly
touched with the local songs and when I
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saw
one of my
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very
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favourite
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singers
on the stage, I
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got
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very
much excited. The
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festival
was a
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different
experience for me
especially
when it was in a
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different
city.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:

1.
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Describe
a
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festival
or
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fair
you have attended.

2.
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Describe
a foreign
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festival
you have
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enjoyed. 3
.
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Describe
a
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musical
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festival
you went to.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a foreign musical festival that you enjoyed. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
363 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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