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Describe a house that you liked while visiting. v.1

Describe a house that you liked while visiting. v. 1
Describe a house that you liked while visiting. You should say: Where it was When you went there How it looked like and explain why you liked this house. Model Answer: I went to visit Ireland (…or say a different country/ city name…) after the completion of my first semester. This would probably be the May 2012 and as I recall it was around 2 weeks’ visit. I went to visit (…say a village or urban area name…), a friend’s house and in this area there was a gigantic house (more specifically a castle) that caught my eyes. I heard that my friend’s father had a good connection that would allow us to visit this castle. I went inside the house and walked from floor to floor and it took me more than 4 hours. This was a 200 years’ old castle and I saw a real castle for the first time in my life during this visit. This was a great and different experience. I have read about these castles and even saw them in the movies, but witnessing the castle was something totally different. The castle was built with stones and the area was more than 2 acres. The castle was surrounded by thin lakes and it had well defence systems. Though there was no soldier or guard for war or defence, yet it took me to the feudal age and the history revealed itself in front of me. The impression of this castle in me will last for a long time. The height of the castle, the shiny stones, stairs, cryptic rooms, large gates gave a totally strange and different view than any other modern buildings I have seen. As this was my first visit to any real castle, I was mesmerised. I have never witnessed anything like this before. I liked the architectural design, height, history related to this, gigantic buildings, defence system, open area, thin lake, the cryptic rooms and war equipment of this castle.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe house or a building that impressed you. Describe an old house you have seen. Describe a place where you have visited lately. Describe a house or a structure in your city.
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Describe
a
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house
that you liked while visiting. You should say: Where it was When you
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went
there How it looked like and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
why you liked this
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house
. Model Answer:

I
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went
to
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visit
Ireland (…or say a
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different
country/ city name…) after the completion of my
first
semester. This would
probably
be the May 2012 and as I recall it was around 2 weeks’
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visit
. I
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went
to
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visit
(…say a village or urban
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area
name…), a friend’s
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house
and in this
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area
there was a gigantic
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house
(more
specifically
a castle) that caught my eyes. I heard that my friend’s father had a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
connection that would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
us to
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visit
this castle.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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went
inside the
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house
and walked from floor to floor and it took me more than 4 hours. This was a 200 years’
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old
castle and I
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saw
a real castle for the
first
time in my life during this
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visit
. This was a great and
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different
experience. I have read about these castles and even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
them in the movies,
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but
witnessing the castle was something
totally
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different
. The castle
was built
with stones and the
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area
was more than 2 acres. The castle
was surrounded
by thin lakes and it had
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well
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defence
systems. Though there was no soldier or guard for war or
Possible spelling mistake. 'defence' is British English.
defence
,
yet
it took me to the feudal age and the history revealed itself in front of me. The impression of this castle in me will last for a long time. The height of the castle, the shiny stones, stairs, cryptic rooms, large gates gave a
totally
strange and
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different
view than any other modern buildings I have
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seen
. As this was my
first
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visit
to any real castle, I was
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mesmerised
. I have never witnessed anything like this
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before
. I liked the architectural design, height, history related to this, gigantic buildings,
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defence
system, open
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area
, thin lake, the cryptic rooms and war equipment of this castle.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
or a building that impressed you.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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house
you have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
.
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Describe
a place where you have visited lately.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
or a structure in your city.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a house that you liked while visiting. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
387 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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