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Describe a family business you know about. v.1

Describe a family business you know about. v. 1
Describe a family business you know about. You should say: What type of business it is. Who own this business. What activities are involved in this business And explain your idea of this business. Model Answer: The family business I know and would like to talk about is owned by a joint family in our community. It is a business related to floral business and this is in fact quite a successful one. The family has a large flower garden and they collect flowers from these gardens and then sell these flowers in their floral shops. Mr Abraham is the founder chairman of this business and the business is growing day-by-day. Now they own more than 5 acres flower garden and they have more than 50 shops where they sell the flowers they produce. As I heard, they have started exporting flowers to neighbouring countries as well. As I have witnessed the rise and progress of this business, I think that was a nice business model. At the beginning, they had only two small gardens and a small shop, and over the years this business had expanded to a greater and bigger business. I think the business plan, hard work, dedication, timely decision, and luck had favoured the business and the family has become a renowned floral business owner of the country.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a business you know about in your hometown. Describe a business you know is successful. Describe a family business in your hometown. Describe a business you think is profitable.
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family
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business
you
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about. You should say: What type of
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it is. Who
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own
this
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business
. What activities
are involved
in this
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business
And
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explain
your
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idea
of this
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business
. Model Answer:

The
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family
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business
I
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know
and would like to talk about is
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owned
by a joint
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family
in our community. It is a
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business
related to floral
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business
and this is in fact quite a successful one. The
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family
has a large
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flower
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garden and
they collect
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flowers
from these
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gardens
and then sell these
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flowers
in their floral shops. Mr Abraham is the founder chairman of this
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business
and the
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business
is growing day-by-day.
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Now
they
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own
more than 5 acres
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flower
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garden and
they have more than 50 shops where they sell the
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flowers
they produce. As I heard, they have
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started
exporting
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flowers
to
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neighbouring
countries as
well
. As I have witnessed the rise and progress of this
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business
, I
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that was a nice
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business
model. At the beginning, they had
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only
two
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small
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gardens
and a
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small
shop, and over the years this
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business
had expanded to a greater and bigger business.

I
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think
the
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business
plan,
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hard
work, dedication, timely decision, and luck had
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favoured
the
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business
and the
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family
has become a renowned floral
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owner of the country.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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a
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business
you
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about in your hometown.
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a
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business
you
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know
is successful.
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a
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family
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business
in your hometown.
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Describe
a
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business
you
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think
is profitable.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a family business you know about. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
277 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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