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Describe a school that you went to when you were a child. v.1

Describe a school that you went to when you were a child. v. 1
Describe a school that you went to when you were a child. You should say: where the school was when you went there what the school and the teachers were like and explain whether you enjoyed your time there. Model Answer: (…say your elementary/ primary school name…) was the first school I went to and this is the school I will always remember. The school was in the middle of my hometown just behind the city hall. The school was located beside a big park and a pond that gave it a nice view. I got admitted to this school when I was only 4 years old and because of that, everything was new to me. I had a very positive vision of the school, teachers, friends and I was very lucky to be in this school that taught me many important aspects of education and life. I studied in this school for about 3 years and I enjoyed my time there a lot. The school was a nice place with a suitable environment for the kids. It was a 4 storied building of L shape and there were almost 200 students there. The teachers were very helpful and very friendly. I never found them in a rough mode with students. Managing and taking care of 200 students is not an easy task and to my surprise, the teachers were very dedicated and caring to do that perfectly. They always treated us like their own children and there were numerous times we got gifts from them. They have helped us a lot to prepare for our study and also taught us about the values and ethics of life. I enjoyed the environment of our school, especially the big garden, playground and canteen. I also enjoyed having such great teachers who were caring and good humans. In the break time, I used to play with my classmates and that’s something I will never forget. The childhood is magical and pleasant and for me, this became even happier because of the school I went to.     Your ability to talk about this cue card topic would help you to talk about the following cue card topics as well: 1. Describe a place you went often in your childhood. 2. Describe a building in your school or college. 3. Describe a place you really liked in your childhood. 4. Describe a school or college you have visited. 5. Describe a place from your hometown.
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Describe
a
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school
that you
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went
to when you were a child. You should say: where the
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school
was when you
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went
there what the
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school
and the
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teachers
were like and
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explain
whether you
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enjoyed
your
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time
there. Model Answer:

(…say your elementary/ primary
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school
name…) was the
first
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school
I
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went
to and this is the
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school
I will always remember. The
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school
was in the middle of my hometown
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just
behind the city hall. The
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school
was located
beside a
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big
park and a pond that gave it a nice view. I
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got
admitted to this
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school
when I was
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only
4 years
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old
and
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because
of that, everything was new to me. I had a
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very
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positive
vision of the
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school
,
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teachers
,
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friends and
I was
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very
lucky to be in this
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school
that taught me
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many
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important
aspects of education and life.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
studied in this
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school
for about 3 years and I
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enjoyed
my
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time
there a lot. The
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school
was a nice
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place
with a suitable environment for the kids. It was a 4 storied building of L shape and there were almost 200 students there. The
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teachers
were
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very
helpful and
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very
friendly. I never found them
Consider replacing "in a rough mode" with the adverb for "rough"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a rough mode
with students. Managing and taking care of 200 students is not an easy task and to my surprise, the
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teachers
were
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very
dedicated and caring to do that
perfectly
. They always treated us like their
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own
children and there were numerous
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times
we
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got
gifts from them. They have
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helped
us a lot to prepare for our study and
also
taught us about the values and ethics of life. I
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enjoyed
the environment of our
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school
,
especially
the
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big
garden, playground and canteen. I
also
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enjoyed
having such great
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teachers
who were caring and
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good
humans. In the break
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time
, I
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used
to play with my classmates and that’s something I will never forget. The childhood is magical and pleasant and for me, this became even happier
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because
of the
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school
I
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went
to.
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Your ability to talk about this cue card topic would
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help
you to talk about the following cue card topics as
well
:

1.
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Describe
a
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place
you
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went
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often
in your childhood.

2.
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Describe
a building in your
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school
or college.

3.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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place
you
really
liked in your childhood.

4.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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school
or college you have visited.

5.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
from your hometown.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a school that you went to when you were a child. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
412 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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