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Describe a course/training session you would like to do if you have time. v.1

Describe a course/training session you would like to do if you have time. v. 1
Describe a course/training session you would like to do if you have time. You should say: what kind of course/training session it is where you would do this course/training session what benefits this course/training session might bring and explain why you would do this course/training course.   Model Answer 1: I am certainly not a “health-freak”, but I have some genuine interest in what we eat, and how our eating behaviour affects our overall health and moods. The issue becomes even more important when we see so many different kinds of food and snacks are flooded into our markets with a very little or no nutritional value. And, it is from this concern that I would like to take a course on improving nutrition and health if I ever have time in the future. This interesting course covers the aspects of biology, chemistry, and even physics to some extent, along with, of course, gaining an important insight of healthier eating, in order to teach us about six nutrients, called carbohydrates, fats, proteins, water, vitamins and minerals, that are needed for energy, maintenance of tissues and regulation of bodily processes. This course would also help me understand how to read food labels, choosing healthier food, hydrating appropriately, and understanding how we should taste food so that we become more informed about the choices we make for the food we eat without spending too much time or money, or without running to a doctor.   This course would also investigate how information about healthy eating differs around the world. By the way, one can take this course from any local health institute or university. People can take this course also from online these days. Anyway, I want to do this course because there are a number of benefits to taking this course. It will allow us to consider the relationships between food and feelings and alternative routes to offer help and support to those who need it. This nutrition courses would also teach me how food, nutrients and health science can be used for medicinal and therapeutic effects – to prevent illness, like obesity, malnutrition and over-nutrition (yes, there is such a thing called “over-nutrition”) – especially after learning so much conflicting information about our food habits and diets.   Finally, I want to take this course also because it would allow me to become a registered fitness professional in the near future.   Sample Answer 2: If I get time I would like to learn the computer graphics designing course. It is a combination of learning some theoretical aspect of graphics designing and then hands-on Adobe Photoshop and Illustrator. These two are widely used image editing and graphics designing tools that emphasising on computer design and website designing.   I would like to get admitted in (. . . say an institution name. . . ) who offers a professional course on graphics designing. They have a good reputation for teaching the course participants accurately and effectively. Since I have offices/ classes till the evening, I would like to enrol in the evening course that starts after 7. 00 pm. The course fee is reasonable and I would have the option to pay the fees in 3-4 instalments and that would be very convenient for me.   This should not be a very difficult course for me as I already have some background on computing and graphics designing. But I will have to concentrate on the course and maintain the regularity. This course would be a 6 months course and that's why I will have to adjust my time during this 6 months period. Another thing that required a course participant is to practice a lot. Since this is a creative task and the course teacher would show us how to do something, the course takers have to work hard to improve their skills and creativity.   This course would be helpful for me to do better in my career. Graphics design is required for many jobs and knowing it would be a great advantage for me. Besides, If I can become a prominent graphics designer, I would be able to work for clients from different countries as a freelancer besides my day job.     Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a course or workshop you are planning to take. Describe an interesting course you know about. Describe a course you did in your college or university. Describe a useful course you know about. Describe a subject taught in your college university.
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Describe
a
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course/training
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session
you would like to do if you have
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time
. You should say: what kind of
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course/training
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session
it is where you would do this
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course/training
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session
what benefits this
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course/training
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session
might bring and
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explain
why you would do this
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course/training
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course
.
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Model Answer 1:

I am
certainly
not a “health-freak”,
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but
I have
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some
genuine interest in what we eat, and how our eating
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behaviour
affects our
overall
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health
and moods. The issue
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becomes
even more
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important
when we
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see
so
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many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kinds of
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food
and snacks
are flooded
into our markets with a
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very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
or no nutritional value.

And, it is from this concern that I would like to take a
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course
on improving nutrition and
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health
if I ever have
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time
in the future. This interesting
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course
covers the aspects of biology, chemistry, and even physics to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent, along with, of
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course
, gaining an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
insight of healthier eating, in order to teach us about six nutrients, called carbohydrates, fats, proteins, water, vitamins and minerals, that
are needed
for energy, maintenance of tissues and regulation of
bodily
processes.

This
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course
would
also
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help
me understand how to read
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food
labels, choosing healthier
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food
, hydrating
appropriately
, and understanding how we should taste
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food
so
that we
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become
more informed about the choices we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
for the
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food
we eat without spending too much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
or money, or without running to a doctor.
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Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
would
also
investigate how information about healthy eating differs around the world. By the way, one can take this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
from any local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
institute or university.
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People
can take this
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course
also
from online these days.

Anyway
, I want to do this
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course
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there are a number of benefits to taking this
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course
. It will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
us to consider the relationships between
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food
and feelings and alternative routes to offer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
and support to those who need it. This nutrition
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courses
would
also
teach me how
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food
, nutrients and
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health
science can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for medicinal and therapeutic effects
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
illness, like obesity, malnutrition and over-nutrition (yes, there is such a thing called “over-nutrition”)
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
especially
after learning
so
much conflicting information about our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
habits and diets.
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Finally
, I want to take this
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course
also
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because
it would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
become
a registered fitness professional in the near future.
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Sample Answer 2:

“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
I
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get
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time
I would like to learn the computer
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graphics
designing
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course
. It is a combination of learning
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
theoretical aspect of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graphics
designing and then hands-on Adobe Photoshop and Illustrator. These two are
widely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
image editing and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graphics
designing tools that
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emphasising
on computer design and website designing.
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I would like to
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get
admitted in (.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
say
an institution name.
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.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
Loose punctuation mark.
)
who offers a professional
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course
on
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graphics
designing. They have a
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good
reputation for teaching the
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course
participants
accurately
and
effectively
. Since I have offices/ classes till the evening, I would like to enrol in the evening
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course
that
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starts
after 7. 00 pm. The
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course
fee is reasonable and I would have the option to pay the fees in 3-4
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instalments
and that would be
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very
convenient for me.
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This should not be a
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very
difficult
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course
for me as I already have
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some
background on computing and
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graphics
designing.
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But
I will
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have to
concentrate on the
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course
and maintain the regularity. This
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course
would be a 6 months
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course
and that's why I will
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have to
adjust my
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time
during this 6 months period. Another thing that required a
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course
participant is to practice a lot. Since this is a creative task and the
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course
teacher would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
us how to do something, the
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course
takers
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have to
work
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hard
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and creativity.
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This
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course
would be helpful for me to do better in my career.
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Graphics
design
is required
for
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many
jobs and knowing it would be a great advantage for me.
Besides
, If I can
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become
a prominent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graphics
designer, I would be able to work for clients from
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different
countries as a freelancer
besides
my day job.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
or workshop you are planning to take.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
an interesting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
you know
about.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
you did in your college or university.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a useful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
you know
about.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a subject taught in your college university.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
72Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a course/training session you would like to do if you have time. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
773 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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