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Describe a book based on which a film has been made. v.1

Describe a book based on which a film has been made. v. 1
Describe a book based on which a film has been made. You should say: what it is which one you prefer - the book or the film what the story of the book is and explain whether the story of the book is a good one or a bad one.   Model Answer 1: I am no movie critique – I just watch them. The same holds "true" when I read a book. Therefore, asking a complete layman person like me, with no movie or book reviewing skills, is like asking to find some treasures from underneath an ocean who can barely swim. Still, I will go ahead and try to do some justice to this topic without sounding utterly idiot. The name of the book is “Rita Hayworth and Shawshank Redemption”, written by Stephen King. By the way, Stephen king undoubtedly is one of the best American authors of horror, supernatural fiction, suspense, and fantasy novels who has sold more than 350 million copies of his books. Anyway, the book tells the story of banker Andy Dufresne (the role played by famous Hollywood actor Tim Robbins), who is sentenced to life in Shawshank State Penitentiary for the murders of his wife and her lover, despite his claims of innocence. Over the following two decades in the prison, he befriends a fellow prisoner, contraband smuggler Ellis "Red" Redding (played by Morgan Freeman) and then becomes instrumental in a money-laundering operation led by the prison warden. Andy escapes from the prison while Red gets released on parole. But, they both reunite in Zihuatanejo, Mexico, at the end of the story with a glimmer of hope to start a normal life. Anyway, even though, I like the storyline of the book, I prefer the movie version of it because it helps me visualize the events of the book in a more surreal manner. Now, talking about the story of the book, I think that it is certainly a good one because there are a lot of twists and turns in it, especially, like how the prison wardens become involved with the money laundering scheme. However, the best part of this book is that it actually teaches to hold onto our hopes, no matter how bad the situation really gets, because it is the hope which gives us purpose in our life. All in all, the book has a great and engaging story.
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Describe
a
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book
based on which a film has
been made
. You should say: what it is which one you prefer
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-
the
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book
or the film what the
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story
of the
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book
is and
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explain
whether the
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story
of the
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book
is a
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good
one or a
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bad
one.
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Model Answer 1:

I am no movie critique
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–
I
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just
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watch
them. The same holds
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"
true
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"
when I read a
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book
.
Therefore
, asking a complete layman person like me, with no movie or
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book
reviewing
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skills
, is like asking to find
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some
treasures from underneath an ocean who can
barely
swim.
Still
, I will go ahead and try to do
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some
justice to this topic without sounding
utterly
idiot.

The name of the
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book
is “Rita Hayworth and
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Shawshank
Redemption”, written by Stephen King. By the way,
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Stephen king
undoubtedly
is one of the best American authors of horror, supernatural fiction, suspense, and fantasy novels who
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has
sold more than 350 million copies of his books.

Anyway
, the
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book
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tells
the
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story
of banker Andy
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Dufresne
(the role played by
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famous
Hollywood actor Tim Robbins), who
is sentenced
to life in
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Shawshank
State Penitentiary for the murders of his wife and her lover, despite his claims of innocence. Over the following two decades in the
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prison
, he befriends a fellow prisoner, contraband smuggler Ellis
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"
Red
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"
Redding (played by Morgan Freeman) and then becomes instrumental in a money-laundering operation led by the
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prison
warden. Andy escapes from the
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prison
while Red
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gets
released on parole.
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But
, they both reunite in
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Zihuatanejo
, Mexico, at the
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end
of the
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story
with a glimmer of hope to
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start
a normal life.
Anyway
,
even though
, I like the storyline of the
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book
, I prefer the movie version of it
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because
it
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helps
me visualize the
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events
of the
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book
in a more surreal manner.

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Now
, talking about the
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story
of the
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book
, I
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think
that it is
certainly
a
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good
one
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because
there are
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a lot of
twists and turns in it,
especially
, like how the
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prison
wardens become involved with the money laundering scheme.
However
, the best part of this
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book
is that it
actually
teaches
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to hold
onto our hopes, no matter how
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bad
the situation
really
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gets
,
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because
it is the hope which gives us purpose in our life. All in all, the
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book
has a great and engaging
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story
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a book based on which a film has been made. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
400 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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