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Describe a job that you would like to do in the future. v.1

Describe a job that you would like to do in the future. v. 1
Describe a job that you would like to do in the future. You should say: what type of job it is how much training would be necessary to get the job what is so special about this job and explain why you are interested in having this job in the future.   Model Answer 1: If one thing that has fascinated me from my early university years is the nature of international relationships among different countries in our world. No doubt, this is a very complicated subject, and the brightest of the minds are able to penetrate into it. On the other hand, I am not even remotely as bright as those people who handle this complicated job so well. But, that doesn’t prevent me from wising to become an International Relationship Expert in the future. So, what does an "international relationship expert" and/or political analyst do, or what is so special about this job? Well, in plain English, he analyzes and interprets international policies, issues, legislation, as well as the activities of governments, businesses, and organizations overseas in order to forecast political, economic, and social trends. Now, of course, it sounds a bit too easy just from the sound of it, but, trust me, it isn’t that easy at all, and that’s exactly where it gets interesting. In fact, a particular event or a political/economic development in a country can frustrate the entire plan or process to forge a mutually beneficial relationship among all countries. A miscalculation, wrong step or even some wrong choices of words can create tension or war-like situation. And, when situations become this messy or unpredictable, it is the experts on international and political affairs, who jump into actions to calm things down by putting matters into proper perspective, to maintain a steady and peaceful situation into our world. By the way, it is not really easy to become an 'international relationship expert' because it requires extensive education with very good academic results and some solid work experience in the political field or internship in different international organizations which research on international politics. Anyway, I am interested in having this job in the future because there are just too much mistrust, hatred, competition and animosity, because of the conflict of interests, among the countries in the world, and I want to be able to minimize, if not completely erase, these conflicts for a better future of this world and our future generation.   Sample Answer 2: I would like to work as a senior secretary in the education ministry of the Government. This position requires a very talented person with experience who would be able to take the necessary steps to take the education sector ahead. Mainly I want to work in this position to contribute to the education sector of the country. Comprehensive training on our education system and various aspects of the education ministry would be required. Apart from training, some experience in the education sector would be required as well. This job does not pay a big salary but if someone wants to contribute to the advancement of the country, s/he would have plenty of opportunities to serve the nation by working in this position and improving the most important sector of the country. I feel the necessity of putting the utmost importance in the education sector and I know how changing the policy and rules in the education sector can contribute towards the betterment of the whole nation. I am attracted to this job, not because of the salary, power or the facilities it would offer rather for the opportunities it would offer to serve the nation and in the most important part of the nation.   Similar Cue Card Topics: Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics: Describe a fascinating job that you heard about. Describe a job or work you have worked or know about. Describe a challenging job you know about. Describe a career or job you want to have. Describe your dream job. Describe a job you think is interesting.
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Describe
a
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job
that you would like to do in the
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future
. You should say: what type of
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job
it is how much training would be necessary to
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get
the
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job
what is
so
special about this
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job
and
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explain
why you
are interested
in having this
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job
in the
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future
.
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Model Answer 1:

“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
one thing that has fascinated me from my early university years is the nature of
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international
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relationships
among
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different
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countries
in our world. No doubt, this is a
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very
complicated subject, and the brightest of the minds are able to penetrate into it.
On the other hand
, I am not even
remotely
as bright as those
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people
who handle this complicated
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job
so
well
.
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But
, that doesn’t
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prevent
me from wising to become an
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International
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Relationship
Expert in the future.

So
, what does an
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"
international
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relationship
expert
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"
and/or political analyst do, or what is
so
special about this
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job
?
Well
, in plain English, he analyzes and interprets
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international
policies, issues, legislation, as
well
as the activities of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
, businesses, and organizations overseas in order to forecast political, economic, and social trends.
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Now
,
of course
, it sounds a bit too easy
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just
from the sound of it,
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but
, trust me, it isn’t that easy at all, and that’s exactly where it
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gets
interesting.

In fact, a particular
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event
or a political/economic development in a
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country
can frustrate the entire plan or process to forge a
mutually
beneficial
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relationship
among all
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countries
. A miscalculation,
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wrong
step or even
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
choices of words can create tension or war-like situation. And, when situations become this messy or unpredictable, it is the experts on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
international
and political affairs, who jump into actions to calm things down by putting matters into proper perspective, to maintain a steady and peaceful situation into our world.

By the way, it is not
really
easy to become an 'international
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relationship
expert'
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because
it requires extensive
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education
with
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very
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good
academic results and
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some
solid
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work
experience in the political field or internship in
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different
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international
organizations which research on
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international
politics.

Anyway
, I
am interested
in having this
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job
in the
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future
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because
there are
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just
too much mistrust, hatred, competition and animosity,
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because
of the conflict of interests, among the
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countries
in the world, and I
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want
to be able to minimize, if not completely erase, these conflicts for a better
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future
of this world and our
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future
generation.
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Sample Answer 2:

I would like to
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work
as a senior secretary in the
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education
ministry of the
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Government
. This position requires a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
talented person with experience who would be able to take the necessary steps to take the
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education
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sector
ahead.
Mainly
I
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want
to
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work
in this position to contribute to the
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education
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sector
of the
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country
. Comprehensive training on our
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education
system and various aspects of the
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education
ministry would
be required
. Apart from training,
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some
experience in the
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education
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sector
would
be required
as
well
.

This
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job
does not pay a
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big
salary
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but
if someone
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wants
to contribute to the advancement of the
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country
, s/he would have
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plenty
of opportunities to serve the
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nation
by working in this position and improving the most
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important
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sector
of the country.

I feel the necessity of putting the utmost importance in the
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education
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sector
and I know how changing the policy and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
in the
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education
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sector
can contribute towards the betterment of the whole
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nation
. I
am attracted
to this
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job
, not
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because
of the salary, power or the facilities it would offer
rather
for the opportunities it would offer to serve the
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nation
and in the most
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important
part of the
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nation
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics: Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would
also
enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics:
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Describe
a fascinating
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job
that you heard about.
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Describe
a
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job
or
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work
you have worked or know about.
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Describe
a challenging
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job
you know
about.
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Describe
a career or
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job
you
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want
to have.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
your dream
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job
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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job
you
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think
is interesting.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
73Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a job that you would like to do in the future. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
687 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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