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Describe a child with whom you had an interesting conversation. v.1

Describe a child with whom you had an interesting conversation. v. 1
Describe a child with whom you had an interesting conversation. You should say: who the child was how you know him/her what conversation you have had with him/her and explain why you think the conversation you had with this child was interesting. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer: I was always under the impression that the children can be “handful” probably because I was never good with children, especially, when it came to striking a conversation with them or understanding their needs. But, all that changed when I met little “Raisu” about a couple of years ago in my neighbourhood. I met the little 5 or 6 years old Raisu for the first time, if my memory serves me well, at one bright and sunny afternoon when he was struggling to fix the “chain” of his bicycle that he was riding. But, after noticing him struggling for a minute, I decided to offer him help to fix his two-wheel ride. Anyway, I had seen Raisu a number of times before, but never really felt inclined to have a chat with him until that moment when he thanked me with a very happy face after fixing his cycle. I asked him about what he was going to do if nobody was there to fix his ride. In response, he simply told me that he would keep trying again and again until it was fixed.    Next, when I asked him if he had any friends, he simply told me that he was not allowed to have any friends of his age (ordered by his parents) because he would always get into fights with them. Our conversation pretty much ended at that point, but before leaving, I asked Raisu if he remembered how to fix his chain. In response, with a big smile on his face again, he said that he didn’t remember. I thought that the conversation with Raisu was really interesting because up until that conversation, I never knew that a child of that age could understand the virtue of trying again and again. It was also interesting because Raisu reminded me of sticking to the truth no matter how embarrassing it really was by revealing the truth to me about the reason for not having any friends. Finally, the conversation with Raisu taught me that it was ok to “forget” about things in life because life would go on one way or another.
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Describe
a
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child
with whom you had an
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interesting
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conversation
. You should say: who the
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child
was how
you know
him/her what
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conversation
you have had with him/her and
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explain
why you
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think
the
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conversation
you had with this
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child
was
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interesting
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Model Answer: I was always under the impression that the children can be “handful”
probably
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because
I was never
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good
with children,
especially
, when it came to striking a
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conversation
with them or understanding their needs.
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But
, all that
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changed
when I met
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little
“
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Raisu
” about a couple of years ago in my
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neighbourhood
.

I met the
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little
5 or 6 years
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old
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Raisu
for the
first
time, if my memory serves me
well
, at one bright and sunny afternoon when he was struggling to
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fix
the “chain” of his bicycle that he was riding.
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But
, after noticing him struggling for a minute, I decided to offer him
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help
to
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fix
his two-wheel ride.
Anyway
, I had
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seen
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Raisu
a number of times
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before
,
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but
never
really
felt inclined to have a chat with him until that moment when he thanked me with a
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very
happy face after fixing his cycle. I asked him about what he was going to do if nobody was there to
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fix
his ride. In response, he
simply
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told
me that he would
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keep
trying
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again
and
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again
until it was
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fixed
.
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Next
, when I asked him if he had any friends, he
simply
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told
me that he was not
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allowed
to have any friends of his age (ordered by his parents)
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because
he would always
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get
into fights with them. Our
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conversation
pretty much ended at that point,
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but
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before
leaving, I asked
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Raisu
if he remembered how to
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fix
his chain. In response, with a
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big
smile on his face
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again
, he said that he didn’t remember.

I
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thought
that the
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conversation
with
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Raisu
was
really
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interesting
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because
up until that
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conversation
, I never knew that a
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child
of that age could understand the virtue of trying
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again
and
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again
. It was
also
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interesting
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because
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Raisu
reminded me of sticking to the truth no matter how embarrassing it
really
was by revealing the truth to me about the reason for not having any friends.
Finally
, the
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conversation
with
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Raisu
taught me that it was ok to “forget” about things in life
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because
life would go on one way or another.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a child with whom you had an interesting conversation. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
438 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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