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Describe a time when you gave someone some money as a gift. v.1

Describe a time when you gave someone some money as a gift. v. 1
Describe a time when you gave someone some money as a gift. You should say: when it was whom you gave it what occasion it was and explain why you gave some money to this person as a gift. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer: I have always preferred to buy gift items for my friends and families on different kinds of occasions, but I had to make an exception when it came to offering some “gifts” to one of my nieces a couple of years ago on the occasion of her 16th birthday as I actually had to offer some “money” as gift instead of some other popular gift items. At that time, my niece had just passed her “O” level examination with top results, and I was supposed to surprise her with a perfect gift. But that didn’t happen because I couldn’t simply make up my mind on the type of gift items which would make her happy even though I searched everywhere in all kinds of shops and markets. I even asked my niece to help me with some kinds of “clues” in order to make my “gift choosing” job easy, but my “plea” didn’t receive any sympathy from my “mischievous” niece. So, I just told my niece that I was going to postpone searching for her gift until her next birthday, and my niece gladly accepted my proposal. However, when her birthday actually arrived, I simply decided to offer my niece a “substantial” amount of money instead of some gift items mainly because I was really busy with my work and a few other urgent family matters, and I just didn’t have enough time to search for a perfect gift, like the last time I searched, even though, I really wanted to do it. Besides, she was kind enough that time around to tell me what kind of gift, she exactly liked, and where she would get it from. She also told me that she would rather choose her gift with her friends instead of having me to choose one for her (perhaps realizing the fact that I wasn’t probably very good at choosing a “gift”). So, when I asked to offer her the money (a rather “substantial” amount of money in that), needed to buy her ‘precious’ gift, she simply obliged.   And, guess what, it worked perfectly well for both of us at the end of the day!
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Describe
a
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time
when you gave someone
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some
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money
as a
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gift
. You should say: when it was whom you gave it what occasion it was and
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explain
why you gave
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some
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money
to this person as a
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gift
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Model Answer: I have always preferred to
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buy
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gift
items for my friends and families on
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different
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kinds
of occasions,
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but
I had to
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make
an exception when it came to offering
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some
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“gifts”
to one of my
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nieces
a couple of years ago on the occasion of her 16th birthday as I
actually
had to offer
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some
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“money”
as
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gift
instead
of
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some
other popular
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gift
items.

At that
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time
, my
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niece
had
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just
passed her “O” level examination with top results, and I
was supposed
to surprise her with a perfect
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gift
.
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But
that didn’t happen
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because
I couldn’t
simply
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make
up my mind on the type of
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gift
items which would
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make
her happy
even though
I searched everywhere in all
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kinds
of shops and markets. I even asked my
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niece
to
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help
me with
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some
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kinds
of “clues” in order to
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make
my
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“gift
choosing” job easy,
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but
my “plea” didn’t receive any sympathy from my “mischievous”
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niece
.
So
, I
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just
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told
my
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niece
that I was going to postpone searching for her
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gift
until her
next
birthday, and my
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niece
gladly
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accepted
my proposal.

However
, when her birthday
actually
arrived, I
simply
decided to offer my
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niece
a “substantial” amount of
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money
instead
of
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some
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gift
items
mainly
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because
I was
really
busy with my work and a few other urgent family matters, and I
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just
didn’t have
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enough
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time
to search for a perfect
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gift
, like the last
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time
I searched,
even though
, I
really
wanted to do it.
Besides
, she was
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kind
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enough
that
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time
around to
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tell
me what
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kind
of
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gift
, she exactly liked, and where she would
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get
it from. She
also
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told
me that she would
rather
choose her
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gift
with her friends
instead
of having me to choose one for her (perhaps realizing the fact that I wasn’t
probably
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very
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good
at choosing a
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“gift”)
.
So
, when I asked to offer her the
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money
(a
rather
“substantial” amount of
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money
in that), needed to
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buy
her ‘precious’
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gift
, she
simply
obliged.
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And, guess what, it worked
perfectly
well
for both of us at the
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end
of the day!
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a time when you gave someone some money as a gift. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
438 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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