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Describe a prize you want to win. v.1

Describe a prize you want to win. v. 1
Describe a prize you want to win. You should say: what prize it is what you will need to do to win it how easy or difficult it would be and explain why you want to win that prize. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer: If my memory serves me well, I won something for the last time during my high school years because of writing an awesome essay. It was just a book that I won, but it meant quite “something special” to me. Now, that I have entered work life, I guess I am not really as competitive as I used to be when I was in high school. But, winning an “employee of the month” award at least at my work wouldn’t be such a bad thing after all, in my opinion. I haven’t started my current job for too long, but I already like some initiatives there to encourage its employees to perform well. One such initiative is giving awards to its best employees every month for hitting certain performance benchmarks. Of course, achieving these benchmarks is not really easy as they involve following certain difficult work guidelines which include finishing certain number of projects/tasks every day before closing of the workday without working any overtime, maintaining “zero” late attendance the entire month, collaborating with other departments for a certain number of hours every week, and not taking any day off unless there are very valid reasons and emergency situations. I want to win the prize mainly because I want to become a valuable and reliable staff of my company so that I am considered for a bigger role in my company. And, bigger role, of course, would most likely mean having better opportunity to learn something new and greater financial advantages. Besides, I want to win this prize also because it would help me boost my confidence so that I am able to grow, not only in my professional life but also in my personal life. Finally, I want to win also because I want to be considered as a role model for my children some times in the future in order to show them that success and fulfilling our dreams are always possible if we can work hard.
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prize
you
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want
to
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win
. You should say: what
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prize
it is what you will need to do to
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win
it how easy or difficult it would be and
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explain
why you
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want
to
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win
that
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prize
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Model Answer: If my memory serves me
well
, I won something for the last time during my high school years
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because
of writing an awesome essay. It was
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just
a book that I won,
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but
it meant quite “something special” to me.
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Now
, that I have entered
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work
life,
I guess
I am not
really
as competitive as I
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used
to be when I was in high school.
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But
, winning an “employee of the month” award at least at my
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work
wouldn’t be such a
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bad
thing
after all
, in my opinion.

I haven’t
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started
my
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current
job for too long,
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but
I already like
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some
initiatives there to encourage its employees to perform
well
. One such initiative is giving awards to its best employees every month for hitting
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certain
performance benchmarks.
Of course
, achieving these benchmarks is not
really
easy as they involve following
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certain
difficult
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work
guidelines which include finishing
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certain
number of projects/tasks every day
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before
closing of the workday without working any overtime, maintaining “zero” late attendance the entire month, collaborating with other departments for a
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certain
number of hours every week, and not taking any day off unless there are
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very
valid reasons and emergency situations.

I
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want
to
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win
the
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prize
mainly
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because
I
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want
to become a valuable and reliable staff of my
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company
so
that I
am considered
for a bigger role in my
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company
. And, bigger role,
of course
, would most likely mean having better opportunity to learn something new and greater financial advantages.
Besides
, I
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want
to
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win
this
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prize
also
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because
it would
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help
me boost my confidence
so
that I am able to grow, not
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only
in my professional life
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but
also
in my personal life.
Finally
, I
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want
to
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win
also
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because
I
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want
to
be considered
as a role model for my children
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some
times in the future in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
them that success and fulfilling our dreams are always possible if we can
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work
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a prize you want to win. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
408 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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