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Describe an interesting conversation you had with someone you did not know. v.1

Describe an interesting conversation you had with someone you did not know. v. 1
Describe an interesting conversation you had with someone you did not know. You should say: who the person was where the conversation took place what you talked about and explain whether the conversation was interesting or not.   Model Answer 1: I try to stick with the same barber shop in order to get a haircut. But, after learning that a new and nice barber shop has been opened recently in my hometown from one of my friends, I also decided to pay a visit there and possibly also get a haircut. And, this is where I had an interesting conversation with the young owner of that barber shop. The young owner, I am talking about, didn’t look any older than 20 years of age. But, he certainly had a way of communicating with his valuable customers. In fact, after talking to him for a while, anybody would think that the young barber shop owner was a very educated and smart person. But, in reality, he stopped going to college for further education after just passing his high school, simply because, according to him, studying beyond high school was not really necessary. And that’s when I felt that I needed to interject because I didn’t quite agree with him. So, I asked him in a firm voice as to why he would think like that. In response, he just told me one doesn’t exactly need to study at a college or university to learn something new because one could actually learn those things just by reading some good books. After all, according to him, learning to read is all one needs to learn about the world around him or her, not some piece of papers called “certificate”.   I wanted to argue with him a little about the subject, but by that time, my hair cut was already done. I think that the conversation was interesting because even a 20-year-old can understand the fact very well that education has become a “commodity” these days where getting a certificate is becoming more important than actually learning.   It was also interesting in a sense that if a 20-year-old can deduce such conclusion, and a bold one in that, after just passing a high school, what possibly could go through his mind if ever chooses to finish his university education!   Sample Answer 2: Last year when I was on my way to my hometown on a train, I had an interesting conversation with an unknown person and the conversation lasted for several hours. I live in the city and my hometown is about 7-8 hours away from the place I live in. I usually go to my hometown by bus but at that time I travelled on a train. I was in a second class compartment of the train and there were almost 10 other people travelling in the same compartment. I found a couple with 2 kids were sitting just opposite side of me next to me was sitting a person who seemed around 45 years old. I was sitting beside the window and he asked me to open it. He then thanked me and asked me about myself. The conversation went on and I learned that he is a senior employee of a large Government organisation. I was a bit confused that he was travelling in a second class compartment at cheap rent.   He started a topic about how the kids and young people from the new generation have little passion for learning and busy doing unproductive staffs. I started defending the young generation and expresses the difference the new generation has with their ancestors. The conversation started to turn into a debate and both of us used our logic and reasoning. The conversation was interesting and I was actively participating in it mostly because he had a good and polite way of conversation. He told his reasoning for this belief but when I showed him my logic, he did not protest just for the conversation’s sake. Rather he agreed that he learned many new facts about the new generation and their way of thinking and lifestyles. He also confessed that the generation gap is unavoidable and the positive changes should be accepted by them. Besides this main topic some other topic arrived like the political situation of our country, the educational system currently we have and what should be done to eliminate many of your major problems.   The conversation lasted for about 4 hours until he left the train at his station. I usually do not continue a longer conversation with strangers and often find people start talking about silly issues with no moral values. But the conversation I had with this person on the train was interesting and I enjoyed it. I felt like there is a big gap between the first generation and the new generation and both generations do not listen and think deeply about the other generation and that’s causing a huge gap between them. I enjoyed to learn many thoughts of our first generations and was appalled about some of the misconceptions. I was also relieved to learn that they have a positive attitude towards the changes which are for good reasons. His way of conversation was also positive and that’s why the overall conversation was enjoyable.
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Describe
an
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interesting
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conversation
you had with someone you did not know. You should say: who the
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person
was where the
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conversation
took place what you talked about and
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explain
whether the
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conversation
was
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interesting
or not.
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Model Answer 1:

I try to stick with the same barber shop in order to
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get
a haircut.
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But
, after
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learning
that a
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new
and nice barber shop has
been opened
recently in my
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hometown
from one of my friends, I
also
decided to pay a visit there and
possibly
also
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get
a haircut. And, this is where I had an
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interesting
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conversation
with the
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young
owner of that barber shop.

The
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young
owner, I am talking about, didn’t look any older than 20 years of age.
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But
, he
certainly
had a way of communicating with his valuable customers. In fact, after talking to him for a while, anybody would
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think
that the
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young
barber shop owner was a
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very
educated and smart
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person
.
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But
, in reality, he
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stopped
going to college for
further
education after
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just
passing his high school,
simply
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because
, according to him, studying beyond high school was not
really
necessary. And that’s when I felt that I needed to interject
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because
I didn’t quite
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agree
with him.

So
, I asked him in a firm voice as to why he would
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think
like that. In response, he
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just
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told
me one doesn’t exactly need to study at a college or university to
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learn
something
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new
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because
one could
actually
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learn
those things
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just
by reading
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some
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good
books.
After all
, according to him,
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learning
to read is all one needs to
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learn
about the world around him or her, not
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some
piece of papers called “certificate”.
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I wanted to argue with him a
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little
about the subject,
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but
by that time, my hair
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cut
was already done.

I
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think
that the
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conversation
was
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interesting
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because
even a 20-year-
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old
can understand the fact
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very
well
that education has become a “commodity” these
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days where
getting a certificate is becoming more
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important
than
actually
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learning
.
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It was
also
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interesting
in a sense that if a 20-year-
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old
can deduce such conclusion, and a bold one in that, after
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just
passing a high school, what
possibly
could go through his mind if ever chooses to finish his university education!
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Sample Answer 2:

Last year when I was on my way to my
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hometown
on a
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train
, I had an
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interesting
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conversation
with an unknown
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person
and the
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conversation
lasted for several hours. I
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live
in the city and my
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hometown
is about 7-8 hours away from the place I
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live
in. I
usually
go to my
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hometown
by bus
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but
at that time I travelled on a
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train
.
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I
was in a second
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class
compartment of the
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train
and there were almost 10 other
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people
travelling in the same compartment.
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I
found a couple with 2 kids were sitting
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just
opposite side of me
next
to me was sitting a
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person
who seemed around 45 years
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old
.
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I
was sitting beside the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
window and
he asked me to open it. He then thanked me and asked me about myself. The
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conversation
went on and I learned that he is a senior employee of a large
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Government
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organisation
. I was a bit confused that he was travelling in a second
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class
compartment at
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cheap
rent.
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He
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started
a topic about how the kids and
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young
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people
from the
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new
generation have
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little
passion for
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learning
and busy doing unproductive staffs. I
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started
defending the
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young
generation and expresses the difference the
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new
generation has with their ancestors. The
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conversation
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started
to turn into a debate and both of us
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used
our logic and reasoning. The
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conversation
was
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interesting and
I was
actively
participating in it
mostly
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because
he had a
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good
and polite way of
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conversation
. He
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told
his reasoning for this belief
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but
when I
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showed
him my logic, he did not protest
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just
for the
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conversation’s
sake.
Rather
he
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agreed
that he learned
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many
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new
facts about the
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new
generation and their way of thinking and lifestyles. He
also
confessed that the generation gap is unavoidable and the
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positive
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changes
should be
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accepted
by them.
Besides
this main topic
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some
other topic arrived like the political situation of our country, the educational system
currently
we have and what should
be done
to eliminate
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many
of your major problems.
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The
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conversation
lasted for about 4 hours until he
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left
the
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train
at his station. I
usually
do not continue a longer
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conversation
with strangers and
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often
find
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people
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start
talking about silly issues with no moral values.
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But
the
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conversation
I had with this
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person
on the
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train
was
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interesting
and I enjoyed it. I felt like there is a
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big
gap between the
first
generation and the
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new
generation and both generations do not listen and
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think
deeply
about the other generation and that’s causing a huge gap between them. I enjoyed to
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learn
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many
thoughts of our
first
generations and
was appalled
about
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some of the
misconceptions.
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I
was
also
relieved to
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learn
that they have a
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positive
attitude towards the
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changes
which are for
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good
reasons. His way of
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conversation
was
also
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positive
and that’s why the
overall
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conversation
was enjoyable.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
64Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an interesting conversation you had with someone you did not know. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
886 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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