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Describe a change you would like to make in your life in the future. v.1

Describe a change you would like to make in your life in the future. v. 1
Describe a change you would like to make in your life in the future. You should say: what type of change it is when you want this change to take place how easy or difficult you think this might be and explain why you would like to make this change in your life.   Model Answer 1: I must say that I am not an ideal person, as in a role model, whom people like to follow. In fact, there are so many things in my life, I need to change, that I don’t even know where to start. But, to start with, it would be great if I could change myself to be a bit more proactive person. Well, yes, I am not shy to admit that I am a bit a lazy person. Well, on second thought, I am perhaps more than just a “little bit” of a lazy person, and I want to get rid of this ‘lazy me” as soon as possible. Let me give you some example of how lazy can I really become sometimes, especially, when I become a bit too busy and occupied with my job. For example, I don’t change my bed sheets or wash them for weeks if not months. Sometimes, when I feel exhausted, I don’t even care to change my clothes or shocks before going to bed when I come too late from work. And, I don’t even want to talk about how I “bother” my subordinates at work to do the little things for me, obviously, because I am too lazy to do them. So, I really want to change this dull aspect of my life, but I know that it isn’t going to be too easy at all since I have been like this since my early high school days. In fact, my grandparents spoiled me since the days they moved with me and my parents. In fact, they loved me so much that they wouldn’t even let me pour a glass of water myself, lest I would become too “tired” of working. Anyway, I would like to make this change because it is actually preventing me from enjoying a lot of things in my life because I am too lethargic to go out and explore the world. I would make this change also because people around me sometimes have a rather “negative” view of me, which can be equally embarrassing and frustrating.   Sample Answer 2: In the future, I would like to get admitted in a reputed foreign university and complete my education there. After that, I would get involved in a research-based job and after working for a few years I would return to my country. This would be a big change for me as I am currently working in a local company have no prospect of getting involved in research-based work. The whole change would take quite a few years and hence I want to start it right from the next year. The first stage is to make this change happen is to get admitted in a reputed foreign university. I will start that in a few months hopefully. This is not a quite easy change as it requires hard work, determination and bit of favour of luck. But I am positive that if I work on with determination and follow the steps required, it would not be very tough for me. I want to get involved in an area of our country where I would be able to contribute greatly. And to contribute to such a sector I would require the experience of working in a research-based sector. In my opinion, studying in a foreign country and then working in research projects would give me a good insight into the sector I want to contribute. Besides, that would be a great opportunity for me as well to get to know the different cultures and learning many new things that would be helpful for me to contribute to our country.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a positive change in your life. Describe something you plan to do in the future. Describe a change that happened to you.
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in the future. You should say: what type of
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it is when you
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to take place how easy or difficult you
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Model Answer 1:

I
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say that I am not an ideal person, as in a role model, whom
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people
like to follow. In fact, there are
so
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many
things in my
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life
, I need to
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, that I don’t even know where to
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.
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, to
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with, it would be great if I could
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change
myself to be a
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more proactive person.

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, yes, I am not shy to admit that I am a
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a
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person.
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, on second
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, I am perhaps more than
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person, and I
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rid of this
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‘lazy
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soon
as possible.
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me give you
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example of how
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can I
really
become
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,
especially
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too busy and occupied with my job.
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, I don’t
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change
my
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bed sheets
or wash them for weeks if not months.
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Sometimes
, when I feel exhausted, I don’t even care to
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change
my clothes or shocks
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before
going to bed when I
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come
too late from
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work
. And, I don’t even
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want
to talk about how I “bother” my subordinates at
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work
to do the
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little
things for me,
obviously
,
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because
I am too
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lazy
to do them.

So
, I
really
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to
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change
this dull aspect of my
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life
,
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I know that it isn’t going to be too easy at all since I have been like this since my early high school days. In fact, my grandparents spoiled me since the days they
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moved
with me and my parents. In fact, they
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loved
me
so
much that they wouldn’t even
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let
me pour a glass of water myself, lest I would become too “tired” of working.

Anyway
, I would like to
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this
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change
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because
it is
actually
preventing me from enjoying
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a lot of
things in my
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life
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this
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also
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people
around me
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sometimes
have a
rather
“
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negative
” view of me, which can be
equally
embarrassing and frustrating.
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Sample Answer 2:

In the future, I would like to
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get
admitted in a reputed foreign university and complete my education there. After that, I would
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get
involved in a research-based job and after
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working
for a few years I would return to my
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country
. This would be a
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big
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change
for me as I am
currently
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working
in a local
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company
have no prospect of getting involved in research-based
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work
. The whole
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change
would take quite a few years and
hence
I
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want
to
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start
it
right
from the
next
year. The
first
stage is to
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make
this
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change
happen is to
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get
admitted in a reputed foreign university. I will
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start
that in a few months
hopefully
. This is not a quite easy
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change
as it requires
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hard
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work
, determination and
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favour
of luck.
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that if I
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on with determination and follow the steps required, it would not be
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tough for me. I
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to
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involved in an area of our
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country
where I would be able to
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contribute
greatly
. And to
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contribute
to such a sector I would require the experience of
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working
in a research-based sector. In my opinion, studying in a foreign
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country
and then
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working
in research projects would give me a
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good
insight into the sector I
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want
to
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.
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, that would be a great opportunity for me as
well
to
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to know the
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different
cultures and learning
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many
new things that would be helpful for me to
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contribute
to our
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country
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
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Describe
a
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positive
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change
in your
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life
.
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Describe
something you plan to do in the future.
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Describe
a
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change
that happened to you.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
70Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a change you would like to make in your life in the future. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
717 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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