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Describe a competition/contest you have entered or participated in. v.1

Describe a competition/contest you have entered or participated in. v. 1
Describe a competition/contest you have entered or participated in. You should say: when the competition/contest took place what you had to do describe the competition/contest and explain how you felt about the competition/contest.   Model Anwer 1: I am glad that this cue card topic is only about participating in a competition rather than winning a competition because if it was about winning, it would be really embarrassing for me since I have never really won any major competition in my life. Anyway, talking about participating in a competition, I took part in one about 7 years ago from now when I still was a high school student. It was the time of the annual sporting event, and I took part in a friendly volleyball match. By the way, volleyball was the only sport that I enjoyed playing back then. However, needless to say, I wasn’t really very good at playing volleyball even though I enjoyed playing it a lot. So, I started to do little practising and jogging early in the morning to increase my fitness level. Anyway, the game started between the two teams which included both the senior and junior students of my school in both the teams. The first 4 sets of the game were drawn, but the final set was really competitive as both teams tried their best to score points. I also tried my best to return the ball over the net, when it had come on my way, but unfortunately, I had failed to return the ball on a few occasions. As a result, my opponent team had a little edge over my team. The game had continued like this for some more time, with everybody trying to hit and punch the ball over the net on the opposite side of the court, and I was getting tired.   Suddenly, another "serve" came on our way, which, we thought, was going to fall outside of the court, but my whole team was proved wrong. Little later, my opponent team was declared the winner. Anyway, I felt really great about the completion, even though I was on the losing side because it made me feel competitive. I also felt really good, when my fellow team members were cheering me and encouraging me to play well because it made me really confident about my ability.
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Describe
a
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competition/contest
you have entered or participated in. You should say: when the
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competition/contest
took place what you had to do
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describe
the
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competition/contest
and
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explain
how you felt about the
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competition/contest
.
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Model
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Anwer
1: I am glad that this cue card topic is
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only
about participating in a
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competition
rather
than winning a
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competition
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because
if it was about winning, it would be
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really
embarrassing for me since I have never
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really
won any major
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competition
in my life.

Anyway
, talking about participating in a
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competition
, I
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took part
in one about 7 years ago from
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now
when I
still
was a high school student. It was the time of the annual sporting
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event
, and I
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took part
in a friendly volleyball match.

By the way, volleyball was the
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only
sport that I enjoyed playing back then.
However
,
needless to say
, I wasn’t
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really
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very
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good
at playing volleyball
even though
I enjoyed playing it a lot.
So
, I
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started
to do
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little
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practising
and jogging early in the morning to increase my fitness level.

Anyway
, the game
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started
between the two
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teams
which included both the senior and junior students of my school in both the
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teams
. The
first
4 sets of the game
were drawn
,
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but
the final set was
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really
competitive as both
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teams
tried their best to score points. I
also
tried my best to return the ball over the net, when it had
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come
on my way,
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but
unfortunately, I had failed to return the ball
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on a few occasions
.
As a result
, my opponent
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team
had a
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little
edge over my
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team
. The game had continued like this for
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some
more time, with everybody trying to hit and punch the ball over the net on the opposite side of the court, and I was getting tired.
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Suddenly
, another
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"
serve
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"
came on our way, which, we
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thought
, was going to fall
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outside of
the court,
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but
my whole
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team
was proved
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wrong
.
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Little
later, my opponent
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team
was declared
the winner.

Anyway
, I felt
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really
great about the completion,
even though
I was on the losing side
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because
it made me feel competitive. I
also
felt
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really
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good
, when my fellow
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team
members were cheering me and encouraging me to play
well
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because
it made me
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really
confident about my ability.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a competition/contest you have entered or participated in. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
390 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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