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Bill's dream of cosmic adventure

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One day, there was a boy named Bill walking in a vast flower field. Suddenly, something from afar slowly landed on the ground like a fire fairy. "Indeed, even though it's a fire fairy, isn't it too small? " he thought and then it landed right next to him. He was very curious, looking at the pot and knocking on that strange fire fairy. Unexpectedly, he had a spacesuit on his body. Then Bill approached again and there was a strange voice coming from the fire elf. "I know you, Bill. You are very curious about the vast universe out there, so do you want to come with me to the planet Utopia? ". "Yes, sir! " he replied. He then climbed onto the machine and fastened his seat belt. It then automatically went up into the sky very quickly and within a few minutes, he was up in the atmosphere. Take a closer look at everything around you and marvel at the beauty of this space. He suddenly exclaimed: "Everything here is really great, can you go faster? I can't wait to meet my friends on that strange planet. Very soon you have reached that planet. Everything is beyond your imagination. This is a wild planet and they have forests, rainforests, and even deserts. There is a very strange creature waiting for us. " Hello Bill. I'm Nick, the planet manager. Glad you came to play with us. Thank you so much. " Then Bill was introduced to the other creatures by Nick. Although it felt very strange, he was also very happy to be here, made friends with so many people. "Oh Bill, I got up already? Did you have a good night's sleep? " Bill's mother said, "Good morning, ma'am. I slept very well. " And the story was forgotten by him. . .
One day, there was a boy named
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Bill
walking in a vast flower field.
Suddenly
, something from afar
slowly
landed on the ground like a
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fire
fairy.
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"
Indeed
,
even though
it's a
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fire
fairy, isn't it too
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small
?
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"
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he
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thought
and then it landed
right
next
to him. He was
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very
curious, looking at the pot and knocking on that
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strange
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fire
fairy.
Unexpectedly
, he had a spacesuit on his body. Then
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Bill
approached again and there was a
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strange
voice coming from the
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fire
elf.
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"
I know you,
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Bill
. You are
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very
curious about the vast universe out there,
so
do you want to
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come
with me to the
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planet
Utopia?
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"
.
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"
Yes, sir!
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he
replied. He then climbed onto the machine and fastened his seat belt. It then
automatically
went up into the sky
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very
quickly
and within a few minutes, he was up in the atmosphere. Take a closer look at everything around you and marvel at the beauty of this space. He
suddenly
exclaimed:
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"
Everything here is
really
great, can you go faster? I can't wait to
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meet
my friends on that
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strange
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planet
.
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Very
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you have reached that
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planet
. Everything is beyond your imagination. This is a wild
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planet and
they have forests, rainforests, and even deserts. There is a
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very
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strange
creature waiting for us.
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"
Hello
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Bill
. I'm Nick, the
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planet
manager. Glad you came to play with us. Thank you
so
much.
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"
Then
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Bill
was introduced
to the other creatures by Nick. Although it felt
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very
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strange
, he was
also
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very
happy to be here, made friends with
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many
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people
.
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Oh
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Bill
, I
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got
up already? Did you have a
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good
night's sleep?
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"
Bill's mother said,
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well
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And the story
was forgotten
by him.
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