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you've won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend with you. write to them giving details of the concert, describe how the tickets were won and why you've chosen you're friend. write 150 words

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Hi Tina. It's been a while since we last spoke. How've you been? I've got two tickets to the Spring Festival musical concert, and I'd like you to come with me. As you know, my town hosts an annual spring festival, and each year they try to feature a different genre of music. Well, this years' genre turned out to be pop-rock. The concert will take place on the 21st of March and will run from 4 pm till late at the Queens park on the edge of town. You wouldn't believe how I got a hold of the tickets! The council had a competition running to try and hype up the festival where they were giving out free tickets. Turns out that Ben, my younger brother, had submitted an application using my address. I came home yesterday to a congratulatory letter in the mail, and therein were the two tickets. Ben told me that he wouldn't be able to attend the concert and offered me his tickets instead. Would you be my plus-one? Remember how much fun we had at the last concert we went to. Let's do that again. Write back soon. Your friend, Mary.
Hi Tina.

It's been a while since we last spoke. How've you
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? I've
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tickets
to the Spring Festival musical
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concert
, and I'd like you to
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come
with me.

As you know, my town hosts an annual spring festival, and each year they try to feature a
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different
genre of music. Well,
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this years
' genre turned out to be pop-rock. The
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concert
will take place on the 21st of March and will run from 4 pm till late at the Queens park on the edge of town.

You wouldn't believe how I
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got
a hold of the
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tickets
! The council had a competition running to
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try and
hype up the festival where they were giving out free
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tickets
. Turns out that Ben, my younger brother, had submitted an application using my address. I came home yesterday to a congratulatory letter in the mail, and therein were the two tickets.

Ben
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told
me that he wouldn't be able to attend the
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concert
and offered me his
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tickets
instead
. Would you be my plus-one? Remember how much fun we had at the last
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concert
we went to.
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Let
's do that again.

Write back
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soon
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Your friend,

Mary.
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IELTS letter you've won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend with you. write to them giving details of the concert, describe how the tickets were won and why you've chosen you're friend. write 150 words

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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