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Your son is learning a second language at school, but he needs some extra lessons

Your son is learning a second language at school, but he needs some extra lessons WymLW
Dear Ms. Sara, I hope you are doing well. My Name is Ritesh and I am the father of Saga who is currently studying in your school in 8th grade.   First of all let me say a sincere thank you to you for being a wonderful teacher that you are. My son has developed an affinty to French thanks your teaching method. Although French is Saga's new favourite subject now, unfortunately he has not done well in the recent exam. This is really strange to me as well, hence I thought I should write to you specifically to convey my suggestion on how can we work closely to improve his exam score. Upon reviewing his score I found out that  he has scored well in speaking and reading but has scored terrible in writting. Part of the reason is that he has been watching a lot of French web series lately which has certainily helped him in speaking and reading apart from your classroom teaching. Here I am assumming that this must be a comman trend in the classroom hence I would like to make a humble suggestion that you may please ask the students to weekly write each other a  letter in French. This will certainly help not only my child but to everyone. I hope you found my small suggestion worth your time, hope to see you soon. thanking you Ritesh D
Dear Ms. Sara,

I hope you are doing well.

My Name is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Ritesh and
I am the father of Saga who is
currently
studying in your school in 8th grade.
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First of all
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me say a sincere thank you to you for being a wonderful teacher that you are. My son has developed an
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affinty
to French thanks your teaching method.

Although French is Saga's new
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favourite
subject
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now
, unfortunately he has not done well in the recent exam. This is
really
strange to me
as well
,
hence
I
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thought
I should write to you
specifically
to convey my suggestion on how can we work
closely
to
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improve
his exam score.

Upon reviewing his score I found out that
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he has scored well in speaking and reading
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but
has scored terrible in
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writting
. Part of the reason is that he has been watching
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a lot of
French web series lately which has
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certainily
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helped
him in speaking and reading apart from your classroom teaching. Here I am
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assumming
that this
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must
be a
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comman
trend in the classroom
hence
I would like to
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make
a humble suggestion that you may
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please
ask the students to weekly write each other a
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letter in French. This will
certainly
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help
not
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only
my child
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but
to everyone.

I hope you found my
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small
suggestion worth your time, hope to
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see
you
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soon
.

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thanking
you

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Ritesh
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IELTS letter Your son is learning a second language at school, but he needs some extra lessons

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6.0
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