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A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. v. 1

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. v. 1 3aAOd
Dear Jam, I am so glad of you when receiving your letter. I was remembering that time when we were finished a study together in university. You are very busy person. You doing a number of different types of part-time and full time job. It sounds like a crazy. Even you have numerous jobs then finding a other occupation. I know you like to travelling one place to another place. Recently, I am starting a new job in the local company. Company name is Trident. It is a huge and beautiful company. we have made high amount of towels and quality of products is very priceless. You like these types of works. They give good amount of salary and benefits also. All basic requirements are meeting you. You are hardworking and manager looking for new employs. I send you all details through email and after that you can apply for position and give my reference. It is beneficial for you. I hope you applying this jobs. I am waiting for your reply. Thank you, Warm wishes, Peter.
Dear Jam, I am
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so
glad of you when receiving your letter. I
The verb 'remembering' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
was remembering
that time when we
were finished
a study together in university. You are
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very
busy person.
Did you mean "You're doing", "You are doing", or "You were doing"?
You doing
a number of
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different
types of part-time and full time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
. It sounds like a crazy. Even you have numerous
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jobs
then finding
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a
other occupation. I know you like to travelling one place to another place. Recently, I am starting a new
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job
in the local
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company
.
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Company
name is Trident. It is a huge and
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beautiful
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company
.
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we
have made high amount of towels and quality of products is
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very
priceless. You like these types of works. They give
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
amount of salary and benefits
also
. All basic requirements are meeting you. You are hardworking and manager looking for new employs. I
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send
you all
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details
through email and after that you can apply for position and give my reference. It is beneficial for you. I hope
Did you mean "you're applying", "you are applying", or "you were applying"?
you applying
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
. I am waiting for your reply. Thank you, Warm wishes, Peter.
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IELTS letter A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. v. 1

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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