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Your sibling has sent you a letter asking for an update on your life. Write a letter to your sibling. In your letter: - Describe what you did for your last birthday - Ask for photos of your sibling’s last holiday - Talk about something you are looking forward to

Your sibling has sent you a letter asking for an update on your life. Write a letter to your sibling. In your letter: - Describe what you did for your last birthday - Ask for photos of your sibling’s last holiday - Talk about something you are looking forward to 7VXY
Dear Jay, Hope you are doing great. It has been long time since we have met. Well, I think we should plan something for the Diwali. What do you think? I have received your letter and was very exited and happy reading it. As you would be aware my birthday just went last month. I had a small party for close friends and relatives. I really missed you and hope you’d have come. You had informed me that you had gone to Europe for the holidays. How was the vacation? What all countries did you cover? It would be great if you could send me some pictures of your vacation. You know, Europe is one of my favourite places! I was planning to travel this year but because of the pandemic I had to postpone. I would like to inform that I am looking for a job change as this profile is not helping me to achieve my goals and ambitions. I have already started circulating my resumes and am waiting for their response. Hoping to get a good job in couple of months. Lots of love. Cheers, Damin
Dear Jay,

Hope you are doing great. It has been long time since we have met. Well, I
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think
we should plan something for the Diwali. What do you
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think
? I have received your letter and was
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very
Did you mean "excited" (=enthusiastic) instead of 'exited' (=gone away)?
exited
and happy reading it.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
you would be aware my birthday
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just
went last month. I had a
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small
party for close friends and relatives. I
really
missed you and hope you’d have
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come
.

You had informed me that you had gone to Europe for the holidays. How was the vacation? What all countries did you cover? It would be great if you could
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send
me
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some
pictures of your vacation. You know, Europe is one of my
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
places! I was planning to travel this year
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but
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because
of the pandemic I had to postpone.

I would like to inform that I am looking for a job
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change
as this profile is not helping me to achieve my goals and ambitions.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have already
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started
circulating my resumes and
Did you mean "am I"?
am
waiting for their response. Hoping to
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get
a
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good
job in
It seems that an article is missing.
couple of
months.

Lots of
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love
.

Cheers,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Damin

IELTS letter Your sibling has sent you a letter asking for an update on your life. Write a letter to your sibling. In your letter: - Describe what you did for your last birthday - Ask for photos of your sibling’s last holiday - Talk about something you are looking forward to

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
188 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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