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You live in a small university town. Last week, you drove to a big city about two hours away to buy a new laptop at a good price. You worked on the laptop all week and finished writing a long assignment that is due shortly. However, this week, the laptop doesn't even switch on. Write to the store. In your letter: tell the store where you live & what happened explain the problem with the laptop state what action you would like the store to take

You live in a small university town. Last week, you drove to a big city about two hours away to buy a new laptop at a good price. You worked on the laptop all week and finished writing a long assignment that is due shortly. However, this week, the laptop doesn't even switch on. Write to the store. In your letter: tell the store where you live & what happened explain the problem with the laptop state what action you would like the store to take AyM3
Dear Sir, Last week I drove to your store to buy a new laptop pertaining to my college studies which has stopped turning on. I live in a small university town about 2 hours away from your destination. To recall the events from the earlier week, I had been working on the laptop to complete one of my assignments which is due in a short time. Now the laptop has stopped functioning entirely and I have my assignment saved on it. I was hoping if you could please schedule a maintenance for my laptop in order to get it operating as well as assist me on retrieving my assignment without any loss of data. It would be of great help. I will be looking forward to hearing back from you. Yours faithfully, Akshit Mehta.
Dear Sir,

Last week I drove to your store to
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buy
a new
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laptop
pertaining to my college studies which has
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stopped
turning on. I
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live
in a
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university town about 2 hours away from your destination.

To recall the
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events
from the earlier week, I had been working on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
to complete one of my assignments which is due in a short time.
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Now
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
functioning
entirely
and I have my assignment saved on it.

I was hoping if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
schedule a maintenance for my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
it operating
as well
as assist me on retrieving my assignment without any loss of data. It would be of great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

I will be looking forward to hearing back from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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IELTS letter You live in a small university town. Last week, you drove to a big city about two hours away to buy a new laptop at a good price. You worked on the laptop all week and finished writing a long assignment that is due shortly. However, this week, the laptop doesn't even switch on. Write to the store. In your letter: tell the store where you live & what happened explain the problem with the laptop state what action you would like the store to take

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