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Your local council is considering closing a local sports and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money.

Dear Sir or Madam, This well-considered letter regards your erroneous thought towards shutting the doors of our regional sports and leisure facility. First, this gym must remain open for the members of my family who reside as longstanding community representatives. Both my mother and my father anguish from diabetes and depend on the fitness center to lose weight and combat this disease. Not only do my parents benefit from the leisure center continued operation, but also my daughter's city championship swim team uses the pool for practice. As an additional point to reject closure, you should recall how the sports facility integrates the community. Due to our geographical weather, snow and ice subsist four months a year, and the center remains the only winter leisure activity option. Even more, a gymnasium embodies a meeting place for the community that promotes connections and strengthens our neighborhood. If you proceed to cease sports facility operations, we will lose a treasured gym that negatively impacts all residents. As you will know, we maintain an obesity epidemic in this area, and the gym closure will only increase this problem. Additionally, many citizens may consider relocating to the big city along with their spending money if you being taking away amenities. Please take these points in mind when pondering the closing of the sports and leisure facility. With Regards, Pankaj Kumar
Dear Sir or Madam,

This well-considered letter regards your erroneous
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thought
towards shutting the doors of our regional
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sports
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
facility.

First
, this gym
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must
remain open for the members of my family who reside as longstanding community representatives. Both my mother and my father anguish from diabetes and depend on the fitness center to lose weight and combat this disease. Not
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only
do my parents benefit from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
center continued operation,
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but
also
my daughter's city championship swim team
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uses
the pool for practice.

As an additional point to reject closure, you should recall how the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
facility integrates the community. Due to our geographical weather, snow and ice subsist four months a year, and the center remains the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
winter
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
activity option. Even more, a gymnasium embodies a meeting place for the community that promotes connections and strengthens our neighborhood.

If you proceed to cease
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
facility operations, we will lose a treasured gym that
negatively
impacts all residents. As you will know, we maintain an obesity epidemic in this area, and the gym closure will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
increase this problem.
Additionally
,
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many
citizens may consider relocating to the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
city along with their spending money if you being taking away amenities.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
take these points in mind when pondering the closing of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
facility.

With Regards,

Pankaj Kumar

IELTS letter Your local council is considering closing a local sports and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money.

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