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Your local council has decided to stop giving under-18s cheap travel on buses

Your local council has decided to stop giving under-18s cheap travel on buses GNeDw
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason for my letter is that I did not use a cheap bus ticket for 18-year-olds in my city. This issue is very important for me, because with the card I can go anywhere for free for 1 month. According to the current issue, the bus must be paid for each trip. The main reason I object to the decision is that this card is very useful for teenagers. And I think that all buses should have such a card. It does not harm anyone, it is very useful. It is beneficial for everyone to issue a lot of such cards. I think that such a card should be available only to teenagers, if not everyone. Please consider this issue carefully. In conclusion, I think this is a very bad decision. It is better for everyone who travels by bus than by taxi. Yours faithfully, Aru Bakhytzhan
Dear Sir or Madam,

The reason for my letter is that I did not
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decision. It is better for everyone who travels by bus than by taxi.

Yours
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Bakhytzhan

IELTS letter Your local council has decided to stop giving under-18s cheap travel on buses

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151 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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