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You went to a store to buy merchandise after reading a weekly flyer when you went to the store the stuff you wanted to shop was out of stock. Write a letter to the store manager.

You went to a store to buy merchandise after reading a weekly flyer when you went to the store the stuff you wanted to shop was out of stock. Write a letter to the store manager. Pge6E
I feel the need to bring to your attention an inconvenience in your store while i am shopping some goods in your shop. Allow me to explain what happened. My name is rutika chaudhari. I lives in PN park society. Two days ago i read the daily newspaper and I noticed that government should be imposed lockdown of one week. So immediately i decided to visit your shop and purchased some household things. But when i went their i saw that there are long queues in front of treasure house. Cause all people want to buy stocks. After-long waiting, Finally my turn came and i entered to shop i realised most of things are unavailable. I felt tense that time and decide to report dilemma. Thus, I am expecting you to take immediate action and arrangements of material. i want to buy soap, Tooothpaste, Toilet pepar and some other grocery like lentil rice etc. Your timely attention to this matter is needed.
I feel the need to bring to your attention an inconvenience in your store while
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i
am shopping
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some
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goods
in your shop.
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Allow
me to
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explain
what happened. My name is
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rutika
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chaudhari
. I
The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "live"
lives
in
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PN
park society. Two days ago
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i
read the daily newspaper and I noticed that
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government
should
be imposed
lockdown of one week.
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So
immediately
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i
decided to visit your shop and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
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some
household things.
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But
when
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i
went their
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i
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saw
that there are long queues in front of treasure
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. Cause all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
want to
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buy
stocks. After-long waiting,
Finally
my turn came and
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
entered to shop
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i
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realised
After 'most of', you should use 'the' ("most of the things") or simply say "most things".
most of things
are unavailable. I felt tense that time and decide to report dilemma.
Thus
, I am expecting you to take immediate action and arrangements of material.
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
soap,
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Tooothpaste
, Toilet
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pepar
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other grocery like lentil rice etc. Your timely attention to this matter
is needed
.
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IELTS letter You went to a store to buy merchandise after reading a weekly flyer when you went to the store the stuff you wanted to shop was out of stock. Write a letter to the store manager.

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  American English
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162 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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