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Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people. Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too

Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people. Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too 06l6n

Dear Sir, Thanks for this warm opportunity for suggesting a key speaker on forthcoming first anniversary of your shop. Though, I would like to advise the name of most dignified person of our society. His name is Robin Sharma and, he is a retired lieutenant general. He has been staying in our commune for last 15 years and, is such a huge motivation for youth of our entire community. Let me explain, why I strongly believe he is the right person for this event? As working for more than 20 years in defense services, he has been well known for his responsibility towards the nation. Through his speech, he can incite our youngsters to serve the country after completing their requisite education. Admittedly, everyone who will pay visit to this would definitely like to stay longer. His impressive voice is known to be highly addictive in our whole section. If you would like to meet him before, I can arrange that too. I look forward hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Kristy.

Dear Sir,

Thanks for this warm opportunity for suggesting a key speaker on forthcoming first
 anniversary of your shop. “Though” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Though
, I would like to advise the name of most dignified person of our society. His name is Robin Sharma and, he is a retired lieutenant general. He has been staying in our commune for last 15 years and, is such a huge motivation for youth of our entire community.

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Let
 me This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interpret
explain
, why I strongly
 believe he is the right person for this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionhappening
event
? As working for more than 20 years in defense services, he has been well known for his responsibility towards the nation. Through his speech, he can incite our youngsters to serve the country after completing their requisite education.

Admittedly
, everyone who will pay visit to this would definitely like to stay longer. His impressive voice is known
 to be highly
 addictive in our whole section. If you would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 him This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
, I can arrange that too.

I look forward hearing from you.

Yours sincerely
,

Kristy. 

IELTS letter Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people. Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

171 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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