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Your friend wants to send his/her child to learn music. She asked you for some information about the music academy that you went to.

Your friend wants to send his/her child to learn music. She asked you for some information about the music academy that you went to. 53YrD
Dear Ruchi, I hope you and your family is doing great. It was pleased to receive your letter last week. As you mentioned in the letter that you are looking for a music academy for Ria and Gautam as they both have a great interest in music. “Shiksha academy” is the best music classes of the city and many famous musicians had also studied in this academy. Shiksha Academy provides all kind of music classes and special training on different instruments like Guitar, Sitar, Piano, etc. There are separate classes running for different age group and according to their interest and they have expertise for every group. This Institution is famous for its unique training which help children to make their career in music field. Well, I would like to suggest you a special teacher for Guitar as your both children have a great passion towards it. Mrs. Heena Patel is a perfect person for your kids and they can join 7 p. m. to 8 p. m. class after the school. I already talked to Madam as I am so close with her and she is the one who teach me Guitar before 5 Years. She has 20 years of great experience in the music field and also very famous for teaching younger age groups. You can contact her on 22333348796 or check for her in the class. I hope you will find this information useful and you can call me anytime for any other information. Yours Lovingly, Hensy Patel
Dear
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Ruchi
,

I hope you and your family is doing
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great
. It was
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pleased
to receive your letter last week. As you mentioned in the letter that you are looking for a
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music
academy for
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Ria
and Gautam as they both have a
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great
interest in
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music
. “
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Shiksha
academy” is the best
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music
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classes
of the city and
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many
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famous
musicians had
also
studied in this academy.

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Shiksha
Academy provides all kind of
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music
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classes
and special training on
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different
instruments like Guitar, Sitar, Piano, etc. There are separate
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classes
running for
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different
age group and according to their
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interest and
they have expertise for every group. This Institution is
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famous
for its unique training which
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help
children to
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make
their career in
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music
field.

Well, I would like to suggest you a special teacher for Guitar as your both children have a
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great
passion towards it. Mrs.
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Heena
Patel is a perfect person for your
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kids and
they can
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join
7 p. m. to 8 p. m.
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class
after the school. I already talked to Madam as I am
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so
close with
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her and
she is the one who teach me Guitar
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before
5 Years. She has 20 years of
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great
experience in the
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music
field and
also
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very
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famous
for teaching younger age groups. You can contact her on 22333348796 or
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check
for her in the
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class
.

I hope you will find this information useful and you can call me anytime for any other information.

Yours
Lovingly
,

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Hensy
Patel
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IELTS letter Your friend wants to send his/her child to learn music. She asked you for some information about the music academy that you went to.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
250 words
5.5
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