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Your friend on the Internet invited you to stay at his place in Paris.

Your friend on the Internet invited you to stay at his place in Paris. 3mRd
Dear Alice! Thanks for your letter. I was excited to get it from you! My family and I are great! There are many different events I'd like to tell you about, but I'll better tell you when I'll come to you. Thank you so much for your invitation, I'll be very glad to come and see you. You know I love so much your place. I can't tell you now when I'll visit you exactly, I need some time to think about it. But I'm going to visit you in the summertime when the weather will be the best. I'm going to talk about holiday with my boss and then I'll buy tickets. I think, I'll go by plane, because going by train is too long. When I'll by the tickets I'll tell you the time I'm arriving. I hope the weather will be great, because I want to spend some days on the beach swim and sunbathe together. I'm looking forward to meeting with you! I'd like to know how are you and when is the best time to visit you.
Dear Alice! Thanks for your letter. I
was excited
to
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get
it from you! My family and I are great! There are
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many
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different
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events
I'd like to
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tell
you about,
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but
I'll better
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tell
you when I'll
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come
to you. Thank you
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so
much for your invitation, I'll be
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very
glad to
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come
and
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see
you. You know I
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love
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so
much your place. I can't
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tell
you
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now
when I'll visit you exactly, I need
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some
time to
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think
about it.
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But
I'm going to visit you in the
Consider using "summer".
summertime
when the weather will be the best. I'm going to talk about holiday with my boss and then I'll
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buy
tickets. I
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think
, I'll go by
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plane
,
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because
going by train is too long.
“When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
I'll
Did you maybe mean "buy" or "be"?
by
the tickets I'll
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tell
you the time I'm arriving. I hope the weather will be great,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I want to spend
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some
days on the beach swim and sunbathe together. I'm looking forward to meeting with you!
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
'd like to know how are you and when is the best time to visit you.

IELTS letter Your friend on the Internet invited you to stay at his place in Paris.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
182 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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