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Your friend has just moved to a new house. Write a letter to your friend and let him know about the gift that you have prepared for him/her. In your letter, you should: -Describe the gift -tell how it will be delivered -explain why you chose it.

Dear Alex, I'm glad to know that you have shifted to a new home and I'm writing to let you know that I've sent you one present to express my wishes on this occasion. With regard to the gift, it's a handcrafted painting of a landscape, which I've specially made for you. It is fitted in an elegant wooden frame and I'm pretty sure that you and Pam would like this piece of art. The beauty of this colorful painting will add an extra charm to your house. As far as its delivery is concerned, it will be delivered to you within this week by FedEx. Though FedEx is well-known for its timely delivery, let me know if it doesn't get delivered on time. As both of you and Pam would be at work during the day time, so I've asked them to deliver it in the evening. Alternatively, you can also track the courier with the shipment number FED478 to arrange a mutually convenient time for the delivery. As for my choice of the gift, initially, I was a bit confused and after thinking deliberately, I thought to present you something handmade. I think handmade presents are more valuable for someone like you who love art and you always admire my drawings, so I hope that this lovely painting would brighten your new house. Once again, congratulations on your dream house and write back to let me know how do you find it. Best wishes, Ell
Dear Alex,

I'm glad to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
that you have shifted to a new home and I'm writing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
that I've
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
you one present to express my wishes on this occasion.

With regard to the gift, it's a handcrafted painting of a landscape, which I've
specially
made for you. It
is fitted
in an elegant wooden frame and I'm pretty sure that you and Pam would like this piece of art. The beauty of this colorful painting will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
an extra charm to your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

As far as its delivery
is concerned
, it will
be delivered
to you within this week by FedEx. Though FedEx is well-known for its timely delivery,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
if it doesn't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
delivered on time. As both of you and Pam would be at work during the day time,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I've asked them to deliver it in the evening.
Alternatively
, you can
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
the courier with the shipment number FED478 to arrange a
mutually
convenient time for the delivery.

As for my choice of the gift,
initially
, I was a bit confused and after thinking
deliberately
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to present you something handmade. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
handmade presents are more valuable for someone like you who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
art and you always admire my drawings,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I hope that this lovely painting would brighten your new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

Once again, congratulations on your dream
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and write back to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
how do you find it.

Best wishes,

Ell
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IELTS letter Your friend has just moved to a new house. Write a letter to your friend and let him know about the gift that you have prepared for him/her. In your letter, you should: -Describe the gift -tell how it will be delivered -explain why you chose it.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
246 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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