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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. r29m
Dear Sir/Madam, I have come across an advisement for the seminar of IT evolutions which is my work area. I am very intrugued about this topic. Hence, I am writing this letter to you. However, I would like to know more about the seminar like its duration, dates, places to stay during the programme. I would also like to know the cost of this seminar. As I am living in other country, I will have to make the arrangements to attend this program. I am an IT professional and this seminar will give boost to my career. I would like you to consider me for this program if everything works out well. Moreover, the company I worked for, encourages its employees to enhance their knowledge and upgrade the skills. Hence, I am very much interested in this seminar. Looking forward to hear from you as early as possible. Yours faithfully, Gayatri Bhagwat
Dear Sir/Madam,

I have
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come
across an advisement for the
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seminar
of IT evolutions which is my work area. I am
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very
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intrugued
about this topic.
Hence
, I am writing this letter to you.

However
, I would like to know more about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
like its duration, dates, places to stay during the
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programme
. I would
also
like to know the cost of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
. As I am living in other country, I will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the arrangements to attend this program.

I am an IT professional and this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
will give boost to my career. I would like you to consider me for this program if everything works out well.

Moreover
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
I worked for, encourages its employees to enhance their knowledge and upgrade the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
Hence
, I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much interested in this seminar.

Looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you as early as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Gayatri
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Bhagwat
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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
151 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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