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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. 7qlb
Dear Shola, Words cannot express how I felt from the moment I stepped into your house on the 2nd of June, 2020. I was filled with joy unspeakable seeing you again after 10 years of been away. I wished I could stay more days but I had an urgent meeting to attend on the 11th of June which is why I left on the 10th of June, I am sure you still remember this. Playing with your beautiful daughter, random gist and discussion with your wife, joining your beautiful family on the dinning table are experiences I never would forget. In particular, the most memorable of the events that happened during my stay was playing video games with you again. It brought back memories from when we were young, how we argued who played better and several funny excuses for loosing a game of FIFA to me. This got me thinking I am not as good as I used to and preparing to spend more of my free time playing video games Visiting you set a higher standard for me as I am now looking forward to start my family too. Perhaps you can come together with my Fiancée to spend interesting time together next month. I have bought the latest FIFA soccer game, a new bed in the visitor's room and also grilling machine to catch up our old grilling experience. There are also lots of nice places to visit here. The popular King Museum we always talked about if 5 Kilometers from my house. I look forward to your reply stating your availability and travel dates to enable me prepare for your coming and picking you at the airport. Thank you Sincerely, Ahmed Ojodu
Dear
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Shola
,

Words cannot express how I felt from the moment I stepped into your
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house
on the 2nd of
When specifying a month and year, the comma is unnecessary: "June 2020".
June, 2020
. I
was filled
with joy unspeakable seeing you again after 10 years of been away. I wished I could stay more days
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but
I had an urgent meeting to attend on the 11th of June which is why I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
on the 10th of June, I am sure you
still
remember this.

Playing with your
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beautiful
daughter, random gist and discussion with your wife, joining your
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beautiful
family on the dinning table are experiences I
The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'would' and 'forget'.
never would forget
.

In particular
, the most memorable of the
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events
that happened during my stay was playing video games with you again. It brought back memories from when we were young, how we argued who played better and several
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
funny
excuses for loosing a game of FIFA to me. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
me thinking I am not as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
as I
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used
to and preparing to spend more of my free time playing video
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games


Visiting you set a higher standard for me as I am
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now
looking forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
my family too.

Perhaps you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
together with my Fiancée to spend interesting time together
next
month. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
the latest FIFA soccer game, a new bed in the visitor's room and
also
grilling machine to catch up our
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
grilling experience. There are
also
lots of nice places to visit here. The popular King Museum we always talked about if 5 Kilometers from my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

I look forward to your reply stating your availability and travel dates to enable me prepare for your coming and picking you at the airport.

Thank you

Sincerely
,

Ahmed
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Ojodu
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IELTS letter You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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6.0
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