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Write at least 150 words. You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in the head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your latter - explain why you want to work in company head office for six month and say how your work could be done while you are away and ask for his/her help in arranging it.

Dear XYZ Manager I am writing to expressing my interest to work in XYZ head office in NYC for 6 months to gain experiences to deal with internal and external diverse communities. I am currently working in Sydney branch for 7 years now. I was awarded as the best employer last year thus I would like to take this opportunity to develop my skill and gain more knowledge by working for 6 months in the head office. It is beneficial for me to enlarge my knowledge about the diversity in the workplace with dealing with more people from another culture by exploring and learning about it. With those experiences, I plan to implement new techniques that I have been acknowledged in the head office. My main role won't be interrupted by this new plan as I will do it online and manage a team to help for the implementation plan. I will be grateful if I can get this opportunity by considering my application and being able to be transferred for working 6 months in the head office. Kindly regards, Haris
Dear XYZ Manager

I am writing to expressing my interest to work in XYZ head office in NYC for 6 months to gain experiences to deal with internal and external diverse communities.

I am
currently
working in Sydney branch for 7 years
now
.
I
was awarded
as the best employer last year
thus
I would like to take this opportunity to develop my
skill
and gain more knowledge by working for 6 months in the head office. It is beneficial for me to enlarge my knowledge about the diversity in the workplace with dealing with more
people
from another culture by exploring and learning about it.

With those experiences, I plan to implement new techniques that I have
been acknowledged
in the head office. My main role won't
be interrupted
by this new plan as I will do it online and manage a team to
help
for the implementation plan.

I will be grateful if I can
get
this opportunity by considering my application and being able to
be transferred
for working 6 months in the head office.

Kindly regards,

Haris
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IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in the head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your latter - explain why you want to work in company head office for six month and say how your work could be done while you are away and ask for his/her help in arranging it.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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