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Write at least 150 words. You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in the head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your latter - explain why you want to work in company head office for six month and say how your work could be done while you are away and ask for his/her help in arranging it.

Purpose of this letter is that i want to work six month in the head office in USA. Currently i am working in Sydney office from past several years. In addition i was awarded best employ last year. I want to improve my skill and knowledge and it can be done if i spend few month in the head office. It will give me oppunity to know more regarding work environment and culture and explore the culture. Firstly when i came back to sydney office. I will try to immplement new techniques which i head learnt in head office. My work back in office will be not effected as i will be doing my work online and some of my co workers will help in that. I will be very greatful if you consider my application and help me in transfering my employment for six months.
Purpose of this letter is that
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i
want to
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work
six
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month
in the head
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office
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in USA
.

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Currently
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i
am working in Sydney
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office
from past several years. In
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addition
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i
was awarded
best employ last year. I want to
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improve
my
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skill
and
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knowledge and
it can
be done
if
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i
spend
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few month
in the head
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office
. It will give me
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oppunity
to know more regarding
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work
environment and culture and explore the culture.

Firstly
when
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i
came back to
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sydney
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office
. I will try to
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immplement
new techniques which
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i
head
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learnt
in head
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office
. My
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work
back in
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office
will be not effected as
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i
will be doing my
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work
online and
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some
of my
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co workers
will
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help
in that. I will be
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very
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greatful
if you consider my application and
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help
me in
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transfering
my employment for six months.

IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in the head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your latter - explain why you want to work in company head office for six month and say how your work could be done while you are away and ask for his/her help in arranging it.

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
146 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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