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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: gp71
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to inform you that, I would like to work in our company's head office for six months to gain some internation experience which is situated in USA. I understand that if I will go there so my it is difficult for you look after my work. But I give you assurity that I will give them proper tarining and they will look after my the jobs. Evern from there I also keep in touch with you and my team so that, I can give you the support. Furthermore, I have created one whatsapp group including you also so that I can keep eye on my team and guide them propery if they required my help. Can you please give me your approval for the same so that I will get chance to work in aboard. I am waiting for this since long time. I look forward you quick and favorable reply. Yours sincerely, Karan Patel
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you that, I would like to work in our
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company
's head office for six months to gain
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some
internation experience which
is situated
A determiner is probably missing here: "in the USA".
in USA
.

I understand that if I will go there
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
my it is difficult for you look after my work.
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But
I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
give
you
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assurity
that I will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
give
them proper
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
tarining and
they will look after my the jobs.
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Evern
from there I
also
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keep
in touch with you and my team
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that, I can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
give
you the support.
Furthermore
, I have created one
Possible spelling mistake found.
whatsapp
group including you
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can
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keep
eye on my team and guide them
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propery
if they required my
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help
.

Can you
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please
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
give
me your approval for the same
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
chance to work in aboard. I am waiting for this since long time.

I look forward you quick and favorable reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Karan
Patel

IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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