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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter ☆ Explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months. ☆ Say how your work could be done while you are away ☆ Ask for his/her help in arranging it.

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter ☆ Explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months. ☆ Say how your work could be done while you are away ☆ Ask for his/her help in arranging it. VBBKK
You work for an Dear Mr Gabriel, I am writing to inform you of my intention of working in the company's head office in Ghana for a period of six months. About three months ago, I started a small project in the organisation's branch in Lagos State, Nigeria, and it yielded good result. I would like to carry out this project in the head office in Ghana so that the head office can achieve more than it is achieving at the moment. While I am working in Ghana, my assistant will help with my work, and there will be need for an employment of a new staff to stand in for my assistant. I and my assistant will continue with my work, I will do the online work while my assistant will be there to do the paper work and communicate with me when need be. I would like you to assist me in making an office available for me in the organisation's head office also for us to get a new staff in Lagos branch. Thank you for your consideration, I am hoping to hear from you. Yours faithfully Conscience Kienge
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Dear Mr Gabriel,

I am writing to inform you of my intention of working in the
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company
's head
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office
in Ghana for a period of six months. About three months ago, I
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started
a
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small
project in the
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organisation
's branch in Lagos State, Nigeria, and it yielded
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good
result. I would like to carry out this project in the head
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office
in Ghana
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so
that the head
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office
can achieve more than it is achieving at the moment.

While I am working in Ghana, my
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assistant
will
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help
with my
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work
, and there will
be need
for an employment of a new staff to stand in for my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
assistant
. I and my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
assistant
will continue with my
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work
, I will do the online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
while my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
assistant
will be there to do the paper
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work
and communicate with me when need be.

I would like you to assist me in making an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
available for me in the
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
's head
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office
also
for us to
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get
a new staff in Lagos branch.

Thank you for your consideration, I am hoping to hear from you.

Yours
faithfully


Conscience
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Kienge

IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter ☆ Explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months. ☆ Say how your work could be done while you are away ☆ Ask for his/her help in arranging it.

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