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You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter give details of the course say how the course would be useful explain how the company could help you do this course.

You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter give details of the course say how the course would be useful explain how the company could help you do this course. gP7l
Dear Ashish I recently came across one course in Azure Cloud platform named "DP-300 Relational Database Structuring and Administration". This is an 5 days online course which talks about various aspects like Server Health Monitoring, Performance tuning and many more. As you are aware, the two recent giant projects that landed to us for data storage and High Availability Solution in cloud environment are the ones where I could see relevant usage of this course. This is going to help us in managing data, peforming health checkups, rectifying the performance issues. From organisation prospect it will leverage us in showcasing the same to our other clients, and getting more business. To go thru is training, I would require 5 days Attendance Reguralization as the timings for this training is Pacific Time Zone which will is going to against my body clock hours. In addition to this, I would surely like to go thru the certification once the training is completed. It would be a great help if you can get the budget approval done. As the cost of certification is verify high i. e. 350$. Looking forward to hear back from you on the same! Thanks & Regards
Dear Ashish

I recently came across one course in Azure Cloud platform named
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DP-300 Relational Database Structuring and Administration
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. This is an 5 days online course which talks about

various aspects like Server Health Monitoring, Performance tuning and
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many
more. As you are aware, the two recent giant projects that landed to us for data storage
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and


High Availability Solution in cloud environment are the ones where I could
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see
relevant usage of this course. This is going to
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help
us in managing data,
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peforming


health checkups, rectifying the performance issues. From
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organisation
prospect it will leverage us in showcasing the same to our other clients, and getting more business.

To go
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thru
is training, I would require 5 days Attendance
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Reguralization
as the timings for this training is Pacific Time Zone which will is going to against my body

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clock
hours.
In addition
to this, I would
surely
like to go
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thru
the certification once the training
is completed
. It would be a great
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help
if you can
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get
the budget approval

done.
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As
the cost of certification is
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verify
high
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i. e.
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350$
.

Looking forward
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to hear
back from you on the same!

Thanks & Regards
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IELTS letter You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter give details of the course say how the course would be useful explain how the company could help you do this course.

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