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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice.

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. DXrp
Dear John, I hope you are doing well? It's a pleasant surprise to see your letter in mail after several months. Although, we do connect frequently via phone calls and text messages, I think it's great to exchange letters every now and then. I understand that you are planning a camping trip in summer. Additionally, I would be happy to share some suggestions to help you plan a successful holiday. As I recollect your appetite for adventure from our university days, I think camping would be an amazing idea for you to spend your holidays. Moreover, you will be able to experience the trills of staying in an outdoor environment in wild conditions. Based on my personal experience from recent camping trips, I strongly suggest that you carry bottled water and some food to munch during your trip as you could experience long breaks between meals and snacks will keep you full during this time. I do have some off time from work in summer and I was hoping to be able to camp together. However, my plans changed recently due to an unexpected deliverable at work. I wish you all the joy during your camping trip and look forward to hearing from you once you are back. Warm Wishes Joseph
Dear John,

I hope you are doing well? It's a pleasant surprise to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
your letter in mail after several months. Although, we do connect
frequently
via phone calls and text messages, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it's great to exchange letters every
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
and then. I understand that you are planning a camping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
in summer.
Additionally
, I would be happy to share
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suggestions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you plan a successful holiday.

As I recollect your appetite for adventure from our university days, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
camping would be an amazing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
for you to spend your holidays.
Moreover
, you will be able to experience the trills of staying in an outdoor environment in wild conditions. Based on my personal experience from recent camping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trips
, I
strongly
suggest that you carry bottled water and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
food to munch during your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
as you could experience long breaks between meals and snacks will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
you full during this time. I do have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
off time from work in
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
summer and
I was hoping to be able to camp together.
However
, my plans
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
recently due to an unexpected deliverable at work.

I wish you all the joy during your camping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
and look forward to hearing from you once you are back.

Warm Wishes

Joseph
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IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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