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You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter give details of the course say how the course would be useful explain how the company could help you do this course.

You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter give details of the course say how the course would be useful explain how the company could help you do this course. GMM7x
Dear Jane, As we discussed in the year-end performance meeting, I was requested budget for getting a training course relevant with the data analytics. I have been getting offers from different training companies in order to find the best price and service since our meeting. Finally, I found two companies which accommodate our minimum requirements. The first company offers a program at a cost 1. 000 USD with a wider program than the other company. The second company’s offer which is within the budget, offers only theoretical courses, not practice sessions. For above reasons I stated, I would appreciate it if you could provide approval for the training course at a cost 1. 000 USD. Considering the program content, this training would be beneficial for realizing our department targets. The price offer is valid till the end of this month. Therefore, it is crucial to make a decision as soon as possible. I am looking forward to hear from you. Kind regards, Sezen
Dear Jane,

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budget for getting a
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training
course relevant with the data analytics. I have been getting
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offers
from
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training
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companies
in order to find the best price and service since our meeting.
Finally
, I found two
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companies
which accommodate our minimum requirements. The
first
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company
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offers
a program at a cost 1. 000 USD with a wider program than the other
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company
. The second
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company’s
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offer
which is within the budget,
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offers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
theoretical courses, not practice sessions.

For above reasons I stated, I would appreciate it if you could provide approval for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
course at a cost 1. 000 USD. Considering the program content, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
would be beneficial for realizing our department targets. The price
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
offer
is valid till the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of this month.
Therefore
, it is crucial to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a decision as
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soon
as possible.

I am looking forward
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to hear
from you.

Kind regards,

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Sezen

IELTS letter You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter give details of the course say how the course would be useful explain how the company could help you do this course.

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