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You will have you move to new city for work. You know some people who live there. In your letter, ask them for help finding , tell them where would you like to live, tell them type of place you are looking for

You will have you move to new city for work. You know some people who live there. In your letter, ask them for help finding, tell them where would you like to live, tell them type of place you are looking for JGY0
Dear Mohit, I'm happy to tell you that i am coming to your city as i'm going to work over there. First of all, i do not have sufficient knowledge about your city. So, i'm having a hard time in finding a place to live. It would be grateful if you can give me a hand in finding a house or apartment for living because you know this city very well. Furthermore, i was wondering if it is possible to rent a place near my workplace as it will save me a lot of travelling time. As you know, i do not like noisy areas thus, i want my new home should be situated in noise free area. I was thinking to rent a single bedroom basement or apartment but the basement should have a separate kitchen and living room for my guests. Alao, it should include all utilities such as wifi, hydro and laundary within the rent. I will look forward to your response, Best regards, Gurwinder singh
Dear
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Mohit
, I'm happy to
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tell
you that
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i
am coming to your city as
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i'm
going to work over there.
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First of all
,
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i
do not have sufficient knowledge about your city.
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So
,
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i'm
having a
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hard
time in finding a place to
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live
. It would be grateful if you can give me a hand in finding a
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house
or apartment for living
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because
you know this city
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very
well.
Furthermore
,
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i
was wondering if it is possible to rent a place near my workplace as it will save me
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a lot of
travelling time. As you know,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
do not like noisy areas
thus
,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
want my new home should
be situated
in noise free area. I was thinking to rent a single bedroom basement or apartment
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but
the basement should have a separate kitchen and living room for my guests.
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Alao
, it should include all utilities such as
Did you mean "Wi-Fi"? (This is the officially approved term by the Wi-Fi Alliance.)
wifi
, hydro and
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laundary
within the rent. I will look forward to your response, Best regards,
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Gurwinder
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
singh

IELTS letter You will have you move to new city for work. You know some people who live there. In your letter, ask them for help finding, tell them where would you like to live, tell them type of place you are looking for

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
168 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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