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You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation.

You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation. XGEdg
Respected Sir or Madam, I, Mary Thomas, am going to work in Sydney at Australia for an year approximately and hence I ask your agency to search for accommodation suitable for me. My travel is scheduled shortly within a month. As a peace loving person, I would prefer to live outside the downtown area where noise levels are considerably low. Additionally, the availability of public transport should be good as my job is in city center. The cost of residence should not exceed 1500$ since my budget is moderately low. It would be much appreciated if there are shopping malls like Wall Mart in vicinity of house. I will provide all the necessary documents upon arrival. Also, if any additional paper work is required while I am here at England, please revert and let me know. I will try to get that processed as soon as possible. Yours Faithfully, Mary T.
Respected Sir or Madam, I, Mary Thomas,
Did you mean "am I"?
am
going to work in Sydney at Australia for
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
year approximately and
hence
I ask your agency to search for accommodation suitable for me. My travel
is scheduled
shortly within a month.

As a peace loving person, I would prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
outside the downtown area where noise levels are
considerably
low.
Additionally
, the availability of public transport should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
as my job is in city center. The cost of residence should not exceed
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$1500".
1500$
since my budget is
moderately
low. It would be much appreciated if there are shopping malls like Wall Mart in vicinity of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

I will provide all the necessary documents upon arrival.
Also
, if any additional paper work
is required
while I am here at England,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
revert and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know. I will try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
that processed as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

Yours
Faithfully
, Mary T.
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IELTS letter You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
151 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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