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You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff. Write a letter to the Registrar, complaining about the service you received.

You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff. Write a letter to the Registrar, complaining about the service you received. 17BA
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to complain about the services in the emergency ward of the hospital. On 10th March 2021, around midnight we had to rush to the hospital as my daughter had acute pain in the abdomen. Upon reaching the hospital we filled the required paperwork and were asked to wait. The attitude of the staff was unfriendly, and we were not being attended, though there were hardly any patients. Whenever I repeatedly requested to see the doctor, the receptionist impolitely turned me away. It was not before some four hours my daughter was attended by the doctor, though he was very helpful and polite. The emergency department needs to be efficient to handle the plight of people which is evidently not the case in your hospital. I would request you to look into the matter, and take necessary measures to improve the service. I look forward to a positive change. Yours Sincerely, Uzair.
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to complain about the services in the emergency ward of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
. On 10th March 2021, around midnight we had to rush to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
as my daughter had acute pain in the abdomen.

Upon reaching the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
we filled the required paperwork and
were asked
to wait. The attitude of the staff was
unfriendly
, and we were not
being attended
, though there were hardly any patients. Whenever I
repeatedly
requested to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the doctor, the receptionist
impolitely
turned me away. It was not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
four hours my daughter
was attended
by the doctor, though he was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
helpful and polite.

The emergency department needs to be efficient to handle the plight of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
which is
evidently
not the case in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
. I would request you to look into the matter, and take necessary measures to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the service.

I look forward to a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Uzair
.

IELTS letter You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff. Write a letter to the Registrar, complaining about the service you received.

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