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You want to hold a surprise party for a friend who is visiting his home town after a long time from a foreign country. Write a letter to a common friend asking for his help in organizing the party and in your letter: • Write the reasons for organizing the party • Describe when, where and how you would be organizing the party • Ask your friend to meet you in person for further discussions You do not need to write any addresses.

You want to hold a surprise party for a friend who is visiting his home town after a long time from a foreign country. Write a letter to a common friend asking for his help in organizing the party and in your letter: • Write the reasons for organizing the party • Describe when, where and how you would be organizing the party • Ask your friend to meet you in person for further discussions You do not need to write any addresses. e55XA
Hello Johan, I am writing this letter to inform you that our best friend Scote is coming back home from the Canada. He recently has graduated from Concordia University with distinction grades. Although he talk to us and his family member on daily basis over phone, he will be here after 4 year, so it would be better if we setup some arrival party for him. I have some ideas related to party in my mind. His home will be the best place to conduct this party on the same day of his arrival in home. Firstly, we ask to permission from this family members to setup the party his home. To make the party unforgettable, we need to buy some specific party related items such as ballons which stay at air, some fancy light that create specific effects, decoration stuffs and food. For all this, we need to meet at my home and then we go to Scote home to ask this family. Before to go his home, we have to discuss about all party setup and if you have some other suggestion then will be talk at that meeting. I hope, we will make it best party ever for him. Your faithful Jamail Zia
Hello Johan,

I am writing this letter to inform you that our best friend
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Scote
is coming back home from the Canada. He recently has graduated from Concordia University with distinction grades. Although he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "talks", "talked".
talk
to us and his family member on daily basis over phone, he will be here after 4 year,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it would be better if we
The verb 'set up' is spelled as two words. The noun 'setup' is spelled as one.
setup
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some
arrival
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party
for him.

I have
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
related to
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party
in my mind. His home will be the best place to conduct this
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party
on the same day of his arrival in home.
Firstly
, we
This is a collocation error. You do not need a preposition after 'ask'. Remove it: "ask".
ask to
permission from this family members
The verb 'set up' is spelled as two words. The noun 'setup' is spelled as one.
to setup
the
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party
his home. To
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make
the
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party
unforgettable, we need to
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buy
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some
specific
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party
related items such as
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ballons
which stay at air,
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some
fancy light that create specific effects, decoration stuffs and food.

For all this, we need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
at my
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
home and
then we go to
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Scote
home to ask this family.
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Before
to go his home, we
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have to
Did you mean simply "discuss all"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discuss about all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
setup and if you have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other suggestion then will be talk at that meeting.

I hope, we will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
A determiner is probably missing here: "it the best".
it best
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party
ever for him.

Your faithful

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Jamail
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Zia

IELTS letter You want to hold a surprise party for a friend who is visiting his home town after a long time from a foreign country. Write a letter to a common friend asking for his help in organizing the party and in your letter: • Write the reasons for organizing the party • Describe when, where and how you would be organizing the party • Ask your friend to meet you in person for further discussions You do not need to write any addresses.

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