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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday, describe some possible disadvantages, say whether you would like to go to camping with you friend this summer

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday, describe some possible disadvantages, say whether you would like to go to camping with you friend this summer 3aaVN

Dear Steve, Hope you and your family are doing well. I am happy to hear that you are planning to go for a camping trip for the first time during the coming summer. I believe you will completely enjoy this trip since it would be great chance to get away from the hectic city life, have a quiet, laid-back vacation and be close to the nature. I have also heard that lake is also beautiful during the summer and have a quick swim in it. However, there are a few drawbacks you may have to experience during this trip. The location you have selected have many insects crawling around especially during the night, so you have to carry insect repellants and cream with you. Furthermore, there may also be small animals such as squirrels that could steal your food supplies, so you have be careful about that. I would really like to join you for this holiday, but unfortunately I have to attend an exhibition at the same time and won’t be able to be with you. Hope you have a good holiday and let me know your experience once you are back. Love, Prashant

Dear Steve,

Hope you and your family are doing well. I am happy to hear that you are planning to go for a camping trip for the first
 time during the coming summer.

I believe you will completely enjoy this trip since it would be great chance to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 away from the hectic city life, have a quiet, laid-back vacation and be close to the nature. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 have also
 heard that lake is also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :gorgeousstunning
beautiful
 during the summer and have a quick swim in it.

However
, there are a few drawbacks you may This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 experience during this trip. The location you have selected have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 insects crawling around especially
 during the night, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 carry insect Possible spelling mistake found.repellents
repellants
 and cream with you. Furthermore
, there may also
 be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 animals such as squirrels that could steal your food supplies, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 you have Use past participle here: "been".been
be
 careful about that.

I would really
 like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :consolidatefuse
join
 you for this holiday, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 unfortunately I This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 attend an exhibition at the same time and won’t be able to be with you. Hope you have a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 holiday and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 me know your experience once you are back.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
Love
,

Prashant

IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday, describe some possible disadvantages, say whether you would like to go to camping with you friend this summer

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

194 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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