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You want to arrange a conference for your company, and you need to ask one of your colleagues to give a presentation in this conference. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter include: Details about the conference Why you want your colleague to give presentation What arrangement will you do for this conference

You want to arrange a conference for your company, and you need to ask one of your colleagues to give a presentation in this conference. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter include: Details about the conference Why you want your colleague to give presentation What arrangement will you do for this conference geW3
Dear Ankit, Our office is having an online conference next week at Radisson Blu to highlight our annual performance to our employees and distributors. You have been a star performer last year and your sales numbers were way past your targets. It would be great if you could give a small presentation on our overall achievements of the company. I think you have a good knowledge about the company and having worked with the company since last 4 years you know about the progress of the company and can easily showcase it in the presentation. Further, many young employees who have recently joined the organisation would like to hear from you about the individual growth prospects in the organisation. The conference will be held for the whole day, and I am thinking to keep your presentation right after the chairmen’s introductory speech. I have made the arrangements for the mic and a projector at the conference room. Let me know if you require anything further arrangements. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Damin
Dear Ankit,

Our office is having an online conference
next
week at Radisson Blu to highlight our annual performance to our employees and distributors. You have been a star performer last year and your sales numbers were way past your targets. It would be great if you could give a
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small
presentation on our
overall
achievements of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

I
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think
you have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
knowledge about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and having worked with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
since last 4 years you know about the progress of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and can
easily
showcase it in the presentation.
Further
,
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many
young employees who have recently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
the
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organisation
would like to hear from you about the individual growth prospects in the
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
.

The conference will
be held
for the whole day, and I am thinking to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
your presentation right after the chairmen’s introductory speech. I have made the arrangements for the mic and a projector at the conference room.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me know if you require anything
further
arrangements.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Damin

IELTS letter You want to arrange a conference for your company, and you need to ask one of your colleagues to give a presentation in this conference. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter include: Details about the conference Why you want your colleague to give presentation What arrangement will you do for this conference

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  American English
7 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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