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You took an elderly member of your family, who was not able to walk properly, to a museum and he/she faced a few problems.

You took an elderly member of your family, who was not able to walk properly, to a museum and he/she faced a few problems. MomP9

Dear Sir/Madam, I have recently visited your museum with my elderly grandmother, and I am extremely pleased to inform you that it is enormously fantastic and enticing all the rare antiques which are carefully perpetuate in your museum. The imperative reason why I visited your museum with my grandmother because, my grandmother immensely admired about the war memorial uniforms and weapons which is exhibited in your museum. Moreover, she is exponentially sentimental while seeing all war associated rare items since, she was seen her father last moments in wearing war outfits. However, everything was quaint and irresistible, nevertheless, one think which I highly worried and faced whopping grapple is due to the sparsely of your museum as well as the high end steps which precipitate grievous conundrums for walking around the hall. Therefore, one implications which I want to insinuate you that you must array wheelchair for the elders those whore are preempt to visit the museum. Furthermore a low level wooden steps also excellent trough for senior citizen's to avoid any struggle moving in and out inside the building. I believe you will take my suggestions in an positive attitude and do the necessary arrangements in favor of older generations. Thank you in advance. Yours Faithfully, Antony,

Dear Sir/Madam,

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museum
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 attitude and do the necessary arrangements in favor of older generations.

Thank you in advance.

Yours Faithfully
,

Antony, 