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You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and can’t stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter, explain your interest in the course describe your problems find out if a refund is possible

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter in response to the advertisement on your website for a tennis court in England. I am fond of tennis since childhood as learning the same from one of the reputed institute of yours is like a dream come true. This help in acquiring different kind of skills, majorly, to hold the racket and as well as the technique of servicing. So, I enrolled myself without wasting a time. I am attended the training for four month, . Unfortunately, I met with a road accidents and doctor advice me to take complete bed rest coming 6 months. I am afraid about the duration of the course time because I am unable to join further. However, I would like to request you that if refund of my amount is possible after deduction the cost of my training held. I had already paid the entire fees in advance. This is a genuine situation and I cannot control neither will make out any way to join my dream project. Hope to hear a positive reply from you soon. Yours sincerely, Tara Sharma
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter in response to the advertisement on your website for a tennis court in England.

I am fond of tennis since childhood as learning the same from one of the reputed institute of yours is like a dream
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come
true. This
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help
in acquiring
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different
kind of
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skills
,
majorly
, to hold the racket and
as well
as the technique of servicing.
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So
, I enrolled myself without wasting a time.

I
am attended
the training for four
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month
Did you just mean “,” or “.”?
, .
Unfortunately, I met with
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a road accidents
and doctor advice me to take complete bed rest coming 6 months. I am afraid about the duration of the course time
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because
I am unable to
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join
further
.

However
, I would like to request you that if refund of my amount is possible after deduction the cost of my training held. I had already paid the entire fees in advance. This is a genuine situation and I cannot control neither will
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make
out any way to
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join
my dream project.

Hope to hear a
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positive
reply from you
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soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Tara Sharma

IELTS letter You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and can’t stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter, explain your interest in the course describe your problems find out if a refund is possible

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  American English
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184 words
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