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You recently went to concert and thought pne of the singers was very good.You want to tell how you feel. write a letter to the singer.In your letter: say how you feelabout his/her performance , give details of your music-related activities , explain how you would like him/her to help you with ypur music-related activities

You recently went to concert and thought pne of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. write a letter to the singer. In your letter: say how you feelabout his/her performance, give details of your music-related activities, explain how you would like him/her to help you with ypur music-related activities p2y3
Dear Richa, I hope you are doing good. I am writing this letter about your spectacular performance last night at stadium. I was on ninth cloud after watching your show because you were the best of all. I felt the pain in your voice and the music was next level. The way you played piano I can’t take my eyes of you. I am a student and I have a music band of 4 people. I use to give performances at my college whenever there is any party as well as at my home functions. Even you can check my music composition videos on you tube but I am still working on my singing skills. Now as you know that I am interested in singing, it would be very beneficial for my singing career if you help me in sharpen my voice and I would appreciate if you give me some lessons how to play piano. I will wait to hear from you. Have a nice day Your sincerely Navjot
Dear
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Richa
,

I hope you are doing
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good
. I am writing this letter about your spectacular performance last night at stadium.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was on ninth cloud after watching your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
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because
you were the best of all.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
felt the pain in your voice and the music was
next
level. The way you played piano I can’t take my eyes of you.

I am a student and I have a music band of 4
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. I
Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".
use to
give performances at my college whenever there is any party
as well
as at my home functions. Even you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
my music composition videos on you tube
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I am
still
working on my singing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
as you know that I
am interested
in singing, it would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beneficial for my singing career if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in sharpen my voice and I would appreciate if you give me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
lessons how to play piano.

I will wait to hear from you. Have a nice
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
day


Your
sincerely


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Navjot
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IELTS letter You recently went to concert and thought pne of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. write a letter to the singer. In your letter: say how you feelabout his/her performance, give details of your music-related activities, explain how you would like him/her to help you with ypur music-related activities

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  American English
7 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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