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You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend. In your letter tell your friend what the event was explain why you think your friend would like the event invite them to come to the event with you

Dear Samantha, Hope this letter finds you in good health and best of the spirits. I am writing to invite you to an upcoming Sunburn event in Goa, India. Like every year this is organized during the New Year week from 27th December to 2nd January 2020. Let me give you an insight into this exciting fest which is eagerly awaited by people across the country. They organize a music party with unique themes such as full moon party for the whole night, where world famous DJ’s play songs with high beats and bass making sure everyone taps their feet and dance along. Not only this, they have arrangements for camping and unlimited drinks all night. I am pretty sure you will like to enter the New Year with this amazing theme party on New Year’s Eve, where everyone will be in their radium accessories and paints on face. I have already bought the passes and two more of my friends will accompany us. Since this is organized in Goa, we can also go to the nearby waterfall and Fort Agauda which you were keen to visit during your last visit. Also, I have made arrangements for visiting Mumbai as I am aware that you firmly believe in Lord Ganesha and would love to visit his famous temple there. Once you are here, we will have a gala time much like what we had in our childhood. I hope you accept my invitation. See you soon! Best Wishes, Smeety
Dear Samantha,

Hope this letter finds you in
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good
health and best of the spirits. I am writing to invite you to an upcoming Sunburn
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event
in Goa, India. Like every
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year
this
is organized
during the New
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Year
week from 27th December to 2nd January 2020.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me give you an insight into this exciting fest which is
eagerly
awaited by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
across the country. They organize a music party with unique themes such as full moon party for the whole night, where world
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
DJ’s play songs with high beats and bass making sure everyone taps their feet and dance along.

Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
this, they have arrangements for camping and unlimited drinks all night. I am pretty sure you
Did you mean "would"?
will
like to enter the New
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Year
with this amazing theme party on New
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Year’s
Eve, where everyone will be in their radium accessories and paints on face.

I have already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
the passes and two more of my friends will accompany us. Since this
is organized
in Goa, we can
also
go to the nearby waterfall and Fort
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Agauda
which you were keen to visit during your last visit.
Also
, I have made arrangements for visiting Mumbai as I am aware that you
firmly
believe in Lord Ganesha and would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to visit his
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
temple there.

Once you are here, we will have a gala time much like what we had in our childhood. I hope you accept my invitation.

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See
you
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soon
!

Best Wishes,

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Smeety
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IELTS letter You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend. In your letter tell your friend what the event was explain why you think your friend would like the event invite them to come to the event with you

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6.0
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