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You recently had a suprising experience. Write a letter to your friend in England, explaining why you were surpised, and saying how you felt about it afterwards. Write between 150 and 200 words.

Hi Susan, Thank you so much for all the presents you sent me. They're awesome! I have a story-time for you. I thought that we aren't going to celebrate my birthday this year, but guess what happened! My friends threw me a suprise birthday party! When I got home from school, all my friends jumped out and yelled 'Suprise! '. I was so shoked! I didn't think that this would happened to me. They even baked me a big cake and put on it sixteen candles. We put on some music and danced to it for hours. After that we were quite tired, so we watched old videos of ourselves. They were hilarious and embarrassing at the same time. Unfortunately the next day was school, so they had to go home. I’m so sorry that you couldn’t be here, it was so much fun. I hope that we can meet soon. Love you, Noémi
Hi Susan,

Thank you
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much for all the presents you
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sent
me. They're awesome!

I have a story-time for you.

I
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thought
that we aren't going to celebrate my birthday this year,
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but
guess what happened! My friends threw me a
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suprise
birthday party! When I
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got
home from school, all my friends jumped out and yelled '
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Suprise
! '. I was
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so
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shoked
! I didn't
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think
that this would
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happened
to me. They even baked me a
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big
cake and put on it sixteen candles. We put on
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some
music and danced to it for hours. After that we were quite tired,
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so
we
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watched
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old
videos of ourselves. They were hilarious and embarrassing at the same time. Unfortunately the
next
day was school,
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so
they had to go home.

I’m
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so
sorry that you couldn’t be here, it was
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so
much fun.

I hope that we can
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meet
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soon
.

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Love
you,

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Noémi

IELTS letter You recently had a suprising experience. Write a letter to your friend in England, explaining why you were surpised, and saying how you felt about it afterwards. Write between 150 and 200 words.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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